Edge of Goodbye

Revised

Illuminate my life, 

My world

My soul. 

Upon forever

Dreams and desires reside

Then ride away 

On the sunset of angry loneliness. Circular searching for

A little peace 

A corner of the table cloth 

A breath of significance in your world. 

Darkened days become darker nights

Another chance at hell on your way to heaven. 

When the bitterness decides to seep from the soul

And the anger leaves its place

Along with it will go 

The memory of your face. 

Standing on the edge of goodbye

Reviews

[LynGeist]

Thank you very much. It's great to get feedback, so I really appreciate the time you took to tell me. Speaking of that.. I have some read requests to get to, I hope to do that soon. :-)

[sithlordjp]

Always beautiful words in here... "Another chance at hell on your way to heaven." I mean, wow!

[Nirego]

So much depth and meaning to words so heartfelt. Great metaphors too.

A really great poem - I really enjoyed it.

[LynGeist]

Thank you. It's always interesting to me the form that emotion takes on paper. Thanks for taking the time to let me know what you thought.

[Nirego]

It doesn't always go the way you think it might.

[LynGeist]

I posted this from my phone so the format is off. Curious to know what u think of the content..