Vapor Kisses

Sit within my darkened dream,
fill my soul with copper light,
Share with me the breath I breathe,
I fear a dreamless night
Your vapor kisses grace my skin
The way a lovers would
Breathing in your essence,
Before me there you stood.
A Phantom of my memory
A moment yet eternal
And as you stood there silently,
A fire still infernal,
Relinquish now the bonds you hold
Walk through the misty clouds,
And sing to me the sweetest song
My love it has no bounds.

Author's Note

Needs some work, any suggestions?

Reviews

[sithlordjp]

Another great piece of writing. I pictured silhouettes silently walking through the mist, longing to reach ach other... and finally touching, kissing, being. Beautiful, thanks for sharing!

[LynGeist]

Thank you, thank you I try to write in pictures I think... So you can see the story in your mind. I'm glad you liked it. Means a lot that you took the time to let me know. Thanks again

[An owl on the moon]

What a dreamish, dark delight... the clouded place of misted wonders... the bittersweet longing... And your last lines seem to give flight to your love.

[LynGeist]

Thank you.. I enjoyed writing this one. I really appreciate you taking the time to read it and comment. Your reviews are delightful to read... :-)

[gabrielle]

i could feel desire, longing, hope on this. i wish i could pen a piece as engaging as this..

[LynGeist]

Thank you that is such an awesome compliment.

[Lewis Davis-Norman]

The words, Perfectly chosen. The rhyme, not forced and easily flowing. The poem, beautiful.

[LynGeist]

Thank you Lewis, very much