when i saw you

when i saw you

A Poem by lorynrrr

when i saw you, you blew me away

i did not know what to say

your eyes were bright blue

it told me what i had to do 

are you the one that is for me

i hope so  cause you have

a beautiful gleem

© 2009 lorynrrr


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This was really pretty. I enjoyed reading this one.
The last word you used was 'gleem' That word was misspelled...add an 'a' and make it 'gleam'
Other than that...it was nice! Cheers!

Posted 15 Years Ago



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Added on March 17, 2009

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lorynrrr
lorynrrr

louisiana, LA



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hey my name is loryn and im 13 and i like to sing i have a really good personality god made me cant you see i'v also an awesome family say what just kiddin so this is me i have green eyes dark dirt.. more..

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