State of the Union

When did our culture become

self-medication, numbing all sensation

soul starving deprivation

money motivation

encouragement of a disbanded nation

drugs for recreation

lack of determination

everybody hatin'

bodies disintegrated

dependency makin'

out of character behavior

just waitin' for a savior

not knowing how to savor

the moment that we're in

who knows what's around the bend

one second you're with your kin

next second you're blown to bits

too worried about things you wanna get

and the life you wanna live

what if you died while faking it

your memory tainted

Reviews

[Lookwithinsight]

I really like this! Can't wait to see what it's like finished, but it's beautiful. Nice rhyming skills too.

[Lizzie Mitchell]

Thanks! Finishing writing is challenging for me. It's always based in emotions and I have to feel them again to write about the same topic.

[Riley Justine]

Amazing! Unless you're planned to add more stanzas I think you can remove the (unfinished) behind the title! This is wonderfully penned!

[Lizzie Mitchell]

thanks so much!
I do plan to add more to it if I'm inspired by this topic again

[Chris]

It's all in the 'tude if you're gonna bring-it... I'ld like to see where you take this one as both you and it continue.

[Lizzie Mitchell]

Thanks I want to make it a song

[Erica Murray]

wow... why am I only recently learning of your tremendous writing talent? Stop! That's my thing, I'm the one who wants to open an Open Mic Bake Shop!

[Lizzie Mitchell]

Why do you sound like one of your aunties?