Alive

something i wrote in July.. when i first joined writerscafe kinda wierd but i dont care lol

I just say it how it is

I feel as if i exist

expressing myself at first

made me want to puke;

before, I couldn't even

fathom what it felt like

I merely neglected it.

like how andy gave away 

woody in toys story 3,

expressing my opinions

is like having to grow up

and leaving the past behind

to a fresh clean sheet of paper

or a computer screen.

Author's Note

suggestions are welcomed always :)

Reviews

[Jason Shadows]

But What If We Can Reverse It? Take A Step Back In Time To Change Something We Wish Would Not Of Happened. Take A Step Back And See It From A Different Point Of View. Thats How We Learn From The Mistakes That Are In The Past But Your Life Is Precious. Enjoy It And Have Fun. From This Poem - Deep Emotions Of Something That Hurts Or Haunts You Digs Its Self From The Past But Creeps Up To The Future.

Now Look At It And See Something Better In Time.
Just Smile Thats All. :)

[Fanfiction Girl]

I like this!!! very good!!!!!!!!!

[robyn.alexandra]

As a new writer I can relate to this on so many levels. A push to grow up, a little odd, but odd is what I love. Well done.

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NICE - this is a beautiful emotional piece :)

:)

[Dream Slave]

The toy story 3 analogy kind of really shows the passage from where you are at to where you are going to. Expressing by itself is not growing up though. It's knowing how and when to do it and who to do it around. Can't express oneself when there is no one because you won't influence anyone, or when there are too many people because many will probably misinterpret what you really mean. "I think therefore I am". Other than that little personal opinion I find everything else to be very nicely placed.

love the similes.
sometimes growing up is too damned exhausting.
Some days I'd rather go back to watching Arthur or something of that sort.

[Wondering Mind]

No suggestions needed; in my opinion, what is written is how you felt it, or thought about it..As you did here..

[T. Everts]

"
leaving the past behind
to a fresh clean sheet of paper
or a computer screen.
"

How true... how true...

[DamienHino]

thats good i remembered that stage it was hard for you but it's a pretty valuable exercise to do

[Tony]

This is not needing any suggestion. It is an articulation of a clear thought.
And it has deep meaning as well.
The first four lines show the transition that comes when we begin to interpret our existence on an intellectual level.
Like, 'I tried to believe things were this and that, but then; I had Thoughts.'
Thought, the Creator of All, brings about awareness, and realization, and occasionally, when properly groomed, Wisdom.
But, as this poem points out, Speaking Your Mind becomes, at least for a few, an obligation of this Wisdom.
We cannot be like the dog laying in the manger who neither eats nor allows the cows too either.
Nice work, Author.