Meeting the Ocean

I wrote this when I was 10 at Camp Keep

The sun is north,

The water is west,

The air is east,

And the south is soil.

 

The beach is so cold

and very old.

It reminds me

of a sunny day

when I start to feel funny.

 

I get so dandy

when it is sandy.

I am going to miss

that big blue ocean

because it is so peacful.

Author's Note

haha please don't be too hard on me

Reviews

[Poetic Beauty]

I like the last stanza in this poem. I love the ocean and have only seen it once in my life time but it is quite amazing. This poem is detailed but for me it lacked a little sparkle. the flow is off the the description is quite amazing. I am sure if you take a look at it later on then you could add to it making it shine.

[scatterbrain]

considering you wrote this when you were 10, this is amazing. a job well done.

but again, you lack that last point because there is no mention of boobies. (is there something wrong with me? lol!)

[Candylove.]

gorgeous imagery liz! I love this, it's beautiful. :)