Welcome to Hell

A poem I wrote for a friend to turn into a song. I don't know if it actually ever got done or not, but enjoy!

 

Welcome to Hell

 

 

Grotesque images in the mirrors

There is no way to escape your fears

Demon children in the night

Pursuing you in your flight

 

Mangled bodies on the ground

To the darkness you are bound

Fires burn and ash doth fall

You followed the silent call

 

Trapped within a hazy world

Watch as all your sins unfurl

Very soon the Reaper comes

God’s not here to deliver you from

 

Evil lurks within each soul

On some it takes a harsher toll

The demons coming, there’s no escape

Blood and rust line the gate

 

Within this realm they will appear

To rape your soul then disappear

Don’t try to run, don’t try to fight

Beware the venomous hell beast’s bite

 

It’s too late now, abandon hope

There is no Father here; this is the end of the rope

Lying, Cheating, Stealing it was your knack

Welcome to Hell, there’s no turning back

Reviews

[Ashly Christen]

wow
creepy
well done
i love it
it is really dark and you did it perfectly


Within this realm they will appear
To rape your soul then disappear
Don�t try to run, don�t try to fight
Beware the venomous hell beast�s bite


and i love how u ended it
a real slap in the face

It�s too late now, abandon hope
There is no Father here; this is the end of the rope
Lying, Cheating, Stealing it was your knack
Welcome to Hell, there�s no turning back

i think ima add this to favorites ;)

[Nephil]

This won the darkness contest? oh well, moderators will be moderators, Quintessential is quintessential, skin-deep is but skin.

I don't think this is that dark. It's not personal enough. There isn't enough emotion behind it. In fact, I find it rather typical. "Look at me skullz 'n demonz, that makes me evil, right?" I can say it takes effort to keep a rhyme scheme alive, but as for dark lyrics, this is no Cradle of Filth. But "blood and rust line the gate" is the best line.

Oh well. Moderators will be moderators.

[Ruby Moon]

really nice but not as dark as you make it to be in your description...
still dark enough to please me though(i guess my mood has taken a darker turn)
BLAH!

anyway...your piece.
i really admire that you were able to rhyme and make it flow real well.
i never been able to do that...
"Within this realm they will appear
To rape your soul then disappear "
"There is no Father here; this is the end of the rope "
"Welcome to Hell, there�s no turning back "
love those 4 sentences.

[Matthew Kult]

So.....dark yes. Very Dark....matter of opinion. Would I recommend you reading any of mine if this is like ubber bad for you....No. But please do anyway.

You know what I am going to say by now. This is one of my favorites of yours, I think its fantastically written. Don't think thats a word.....anyway....You painted a picture with your words and that is something I do look for. I enjoy reading but if the words don't do anything for you then there nothing. You have that ability to take words and paint them over a blue sky in many different lights. Great work.

[Nightwish Ruin]

GREAT POEM I LOVE THE RHYME SCHEME. I CAN SEE WHAT IS HAPPENING AS YOU EXPLAIN IT. I LOVE IT. GREAT JOB...NIGHTWISH