Welcome to Hell

A poem I wrote for a friend to turn into a song. I don't know if it actually ever got done or not, but enjoy!

 

Welcome to Hell

 

 

Grotesque images in the mirrors

There is no way to escape your fears

Demon children in the night

Pursuing you in your flight

 

Mangled bodies on the ground

To the darkness you are bound

Fires burn and ash doth fall

You followed the silent call

 

Trapped within a hazy world

Watch as all your sins unfurl

Very soon the Reaper comes

God’s not here to deliver you from

 

Evil lurks within each soul

On some it takes a harsher toll

The demons coming, there’s no escape

Blood and rust line the gate

 

Within this realm they will appear

To rape your soul then disappear

Don’t try to run, don’t try to fight

Beware the venomous hell beast’s bite

 

It’s too late now, abandon hope

There is no Father here; this is the end of the rope

Lying, Cheating, Stealing it was your knack

Welcome to Hell, there’s no turning back

Reviews

[Ashly Christen]

wow
creepy
well done
i love it
it is really dark and you did it perfectly


Within this realm they will appear
To rape your soul then disappear
Don�t try to run, don�t try to fight
Beware the venomous hell beast�s bite


and i love how u ended it
a real slap in the face

It�s too late now, abandon hope
There is no Father here; this is the end of the rope
Lying, Cheating, Stealing it was your knack
Welcome to Hell, there�s no turning back

i think ima add this to favorites ;)

[;]

Loved it!!!!!...It's like a poem of what the Devil will say to you when he recruits you to be one of his slaves or minions....I would like this better as a poem than a song...But thats just me and sumtimes ppl don't understand me so you don't have to listen to anything I say! :) Except THANX FOR ENTERING THIS PIECE IN MY CONTEST! Hope you come and check out sum of my stuff! With that off my chest...Great Job!
Yea its me...the one you Envy,
Mistress E

[Tania Leigh]

"Within this realm they will appear
To rape your soul then disappear
Don't try to run, don't try to fight
Beware the venomous hell beast's bite"

Nice! "To rape your soul" has got to be one of the most intense phrases I've heard.
Powerful stuff here. Great write.

[@dan@]

Yes, there is no way to escape your fears............
and it is not advisable to do so as well,
The evil that lurks within each soul.............
can doom your fate or lift you in the direction of light
through the understanding and acceptance of all you can not change.
Very nice write LLN thought provoking as you can see.lol and wickedly true.

[Jared Kardos]

Very creepy, good job. :)

[Works of Progress]

METAL!!!!(shouted in that 80's high pitched scream) No but seriously it was good, it brought me back to when I was 13 and first started listening to metal and becoming really involved in music. It's almost like if Mercyful Fate, Venom and Iced Earth had a love child ,it would be this.

[E. J. Gette]

This was great. It reminds me of something you would read at the beginning of a great fantasy novel. It flows so well, and a great use of words. I may have to ask you to write something for one of my stories someday. :)
Write on!

[Chaos X 3]

Awesome write. What a poetical welcome to hell.

[Robert Luna]

You painted a scene that played out in my mind's eye so wonderfully. I was stopped in my tracks and had to re-read this just so I could truly enjoy all of it.

Great Job!!!

[Fantasyfairy]

Well, a good poem, not as dark as the desrciption says it is going to be, but You use your words well and descibe it well. "To rape your soul then disappear", that was my favourite line. A well written poem with great rythum, and describtion. Really enjoyable read, thanx for entering my contest hun, XX

[Silvia - Scribo, Ergo S..]

Welcome to Hell indeed! Last stop purgartory .... Powerful, yet snotty and in your face. - Welcome to my favourites library!