this makes me think to hard it was a good write though but now since i am stuck inside my head thinking im gonna go...hmmm...some how sit on a big rock coming out of the middle of a river...well it was a pleasure reading your work and i will continue ur stuff after my river sit thingy
Pretty good, m'dear. One thing I have to say, though--it's not a critique, just noticed a typo. In the third stanza, third line, I think you meant "quiet drink" instead of "quite drink." Just FYI.
Other then that minor detail, great poem. Hopefully it got that steam out of ya.
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