All I want to do is
Be here with you.
Can you hold me tight? Try and
Drown me with your love.
Everything that I do, I do
For only you. So
Give me your
Heart, and give me your soul.
I promise that I’ll be very careful.
Just trust me and take my hand.
Kiss me deeply,
Love me passionately.
Move me like you’ve
Never moved another.
Open your heart, and
Pour it out to me.
Quietly whisper in my ear,
Resounding confessions of love.
Stir my heart, and
Tell me you love me.
Under a dark,
Velvet sky,
We talk about all the things we are going to do, and e-
Xotic places we will go.
Yes, stir these emotions, and drive me crazy. Taste my
Zesty peppermint kiss.
Writing should always be about the autor's enjoyment first. That way the readers can feel his/her passion about their work. It was a nice, mellow piece.
nice job, i liked the entire passionate concept, as well
as the emphasize on the desirously blisful romantic reflection
the idea of a peppermint kiss, thats lighthearted and cheery,
the eloquent form, this is a fun read, expressed with
heartfelt enchanting depth, i love the ending!
:)
the whole thing is really good
i think if i had to pick something that is not so good...it would be the last 4 lines
but only because i have some prejudge against some of those alphabates
(namely "X" and "Z")
they are always so hard to make words with...
and also the lines are a little longer then the rest of the piece
Hey, this was a very beautiful poem. I really like how you worked in each letter of the alphabet. It flows along really nice and has a powerful message. Great job sweeie!
XOXOXOXO
Brit
Argh! I have such difficulties rating and reviewing love poems. They are all special and beuatiful in their own way. I think that love skews my judgment.
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