Teardrops

What do you think of this one?

Teardrops falling from a leaf

Sunlight shining above the tree

Morning light that lights the sky

Where ideas come to life

 

Teardrops falling from a roof

Soothing sound of the rain hitting the ground

A depressive view of life is born

But a vital dream is gone

 

Teardrops falling from the sky

It rains wildly with lies

A little boy stands in the front door of his house

Waiting for his mommy to return home in time

 

Teardrops falling from the earth

It trembles and moves with death

Animals roaming around earth

Waiting patiently for their death

 

Teardrops falling from sky

Its another twisted day with lies

But I've learned how to come out of it

Without crying at night

Reviews

[dan]

zardo, This is the type of poem that has the reader thinking, "Wow, I bet the writer really put a lot of thought into this," when in reality (I think so, anyway) the poem just flowed out like honey from a hive. So many very nice turns of phrase, in particular "...A little boy stands in the front door of his house Waiting for his mommy to return home in time." That couplet alone is worth the price of admission to this picture show. Very nicely done, Lizardo! take care...dan

[Lizardo]

Thank you so much dan, your reviews really mean a lot, thanks :)

[Moonlight]

Wow.... Its a really heart wrenching poem Lizardo. This.... This is poem is really deep and so amazing. I am definitely out of words to say..
A poet's talent is known by the beauty of his poems. You are definitely a great poet because this is beautiful.
The feelings become so transparent as we see the depth of the words... I love this poem.

[Lizardo]

Thank you so much :) I really really appreciate it :)

[Moonlight]

You're most welcome. :)

[Daisy]

wow such sad explanation..... but such reality.... great poem as always

[Lizardo]

Thank you Daisy!

[Perkele.7885]

I have some issues with this one from a personal point of view as I read it Lizardo. It reads so negativity to me and I have already fought and won a terrible war I fought with negativity.
line 13 Teardrops falling from the earth gave me pause to understand
the poem is is well structured and keeps to the topic though a dreary one

[Lizardo]

Don't worry Perkele we all have our different point, I can feel on that one, I'm fighting with depression. I'll post something happy later and you should be the one to read it first :)

[wordman]

sounds like a great song my friend .

[Lizardo]

Thank you so much wordman, it means a lot!