Atoms

Atoms and Molecules

We live in a world of Atoms

Living around the past and the present 

Is this about our life is all about?

Promptly I become more mature 

As time goes on

I wanna tell you 

That we're all Atoms

Rushing againts each other

We become pararell to each other

Maybe its time to become Molecules

We live in a world of Atoms 

We live in a world of darkness and light

Trouble is a pain in our head

and Mistakes will always be mistakes

I need to tell you

That we're all living a life 

Even if you feel lonely

There are atoms around you

Maybe we need to become Molecules

We dream of being humans

We begin our life since we first think

Because our mind is a great desing

I wanna confess 

That we're all Atoms

Lonely crashing into each other

Maybe we need to become Molecules

I wanna tell you

To never give up 

I wanna tell you 

That you may be an Atom

Thats because you still need to grow

Maybe we need to become molecules

Maybe we need to become Molecules.

Reviews

[CA Anurag Sharma]

the way it has been presented is unique in itself....just loved it.... and yah enjoyed the poem too... this is something different....

[Daisy]

yup it's true..... coz you can't give up as u don't know how much near to ur goal u may be

[sunprincess]

.......a most excellent write....wish more poets would write something similar ★

[Jamestown]

Science and poetry, very thought provoking and fun to read!
Thanks for sharing and b-blessed!

[Coyote Poetry]

Science and poetry. You made it work. I never liked science. Too straight forward for me. I like the thoughts and the ending. In the end. What do we become? Thank you my friend for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

[Confuser]

Atoms: Sometimes we all feel so very small, and the poem asks many important questions; the complexities of life, as an atom, alone, building gathering attracted to each other we will become stronger, thus the molecule....Your message/theme of never giving up is beautiful and I love it. Thanks Lizardo. Keep writing...Dale

[Lizardo]

Thank you so much Dale! I'm really happy that you like this one, it really came out of my heart (and a good song of course lol) Thanks for the review :)

[Confuser]

You're welcome!!!

[Perkele.7885]

I find your poem to be a most interesting project. Before publishing however, time should be spent on grammar and editing.

[Lizardo]

Hmm, interesting, I will check it out more now that I think of it.
Thanks for your helping reviews Perkele.

[Dani The Unreviewed]

It is very creative that you describe the need for connecting with people like a chemical reaction...lol. Anyways, back to the point its very well done :) rating 100#

[Lizardo]

You got the whole Idea of the poem IM! nice one and thanks for the review too :)

[Dani The Unreviewed]

Any time my friend :)

[dan]

After graduating from molecular status perhaps we become organisms? An interesting idea for a write, very creative and unexpected. Nice job. take care...dan

[Lizardo]

Thank you so much Dan, I really appreciete it :)

[Cool Girl]

This is extraordinary! You did an incredible job! I love how it's scientific but still interesting and creative. It flows beautifully! I absolutely loved it!

[Lizardo]

Thanks Aless, coming from you this really means a lot :) I really appreciete it

[Cool Girl]

You're very welcome! Amazing job! :)