The thing I see most is uncertainty. You talk about thinking of the future, but you never say what you think. That would be interesting, really. What do you think?
Yes, there is always uncertainty. We all have uncertainty. Maybe this should be titled, "Uncertainty about the future", because you include no thoughts about the future, but ponderings. As that, this is a perfect representation of where most people are in their thinking. I am uncertain. Everyone I know is uncertain. I wish I had real thoughts of the future, but I don't.
If you have dreams, let's have them. You mention aspirations in the authors' notes. This should be in the poem. Be direct. Tell us about your dreams. That would be thoughts about the future. Go ahead and bare your soul and your dreams. I want to know.
Very nice piece Lizardo. I like it. Nice flow. The way to achieve your dreams is to write them down and I have little doubt that you will achieve yours.
Wow!! Lizardo, This is great!! Love how you have taken your thoughts and transposed them to poetry!!! So hope you realize your dreams, keep that positivity and never lose sight of your goal!!! . . . and keep writing poems like this!!! alf
I like the simplicity of your words with a topic that can be really complex. It grounds the poem. I also like the contradiction in the last 2 lines, because i think it represents humans' desire to to keep dreaming big, even if we tell ourselves not to. but I think the element I like most is the repetition of "now" in the first stanza. Nice creative touch! Great write!
Posted 9 Years Ago
9 Years Ago
Thank you so much Emily! I'm glad you liked this one
I think that you have mentioned your aspirations before re designing planes and flying Lizardo - this shows just how encompassing that dream of yours is - its in your waking and your sleeping and with such drive Im sure you will make that dream come true.
Im sure our thoughts do have a direct impact, thats why a positive mental attitude is needed and you exhibit such an attitude I feel.
Dont stop dreaming my friend.
Good writing.
I love this! You never know what kind of person you will be tomorrow, I experience that a lot. If something happens at work and I handle it one way, but I knew if it happened two weeks ago I would have handled it a different way. It all depends on how you grow as a person. Not even you can predict yourself because change is always happening. Very thought provoking.