I really like this, so very true how we all have to grow up,.. be yourself. No use trying to be something you are not then we miss out on the true authentic you !!
Great write!!
Posted 9 Years Ago
9 Years Ago
Thank you somuch sereena! I'm glad you like this one :)
''Nature's first green is gold
Her hardest hue to hold
Her early leaf's a flower
But only so an hour
Then leaf subsides to leaf
So Eden sank to grief
So dawn goes down to day
Nothing gold can stay''
-Robert Frost
Posted 9 Years Ago
9 Years Ago
Thats a beautiful line Shaun...
Thanks for the review my friend :)
9 Years Ago
you're welcome
i really liked yours
the quote is from one of my favori.. read moreyou're welcome
i really liked yours
the quote is from one of my favorite poems
it's about childhood and growing up
which is the same thing your poem seems to be about
it's also taken from one of my favorite books/films I read at school last year and I quote from Johnny to Ponyboy...
“I've been thinking about it, and that poem, that guy that wrote it, he meant you're gold when you're a kid, like green. When you're a kid everything's new, dawn. It's just when you get used to everything that it's day. Like the way you dig sunsets, Pony. That's gold. Keep that way, it's a good way to be.”
the difference here from your poem is that S.E Hinton is saying that rather than change and grow up,.. read morethe difference here from your poem is that S.E Hinton is saying that rather than change and grow up, we remain kids forever at heart and never let life change us
to stay gold
9 Years Ago
I love that poem "Nothing Gold Can Stay" by Robert Frost..
The Outsiders is a good bo.. read moreI love that poem "Nothing Gold Can Stay" by Robert Frost..
The Outsiders is a good book. It's one of my favorites actually :)
One of my favorite lines of the whole book was "Stay gold, Ponyboy.."
yep we all grow up sadly.and you can't be someone else or then you become a second imitation , You have to be yourself cos you are an original, one and unique, nice write
Posted 9 Years Ago
9 Years Ago
Thanks Andrew, I know that the poem didn't quite rhyme but I felt like I should write it like that. .. read moreThanks Andrew, I know that the poem didn't quite rhyme but I felt like I should write it like that.
Thanks for the review :)
The sad part. The words you wrote are true.
"We'll all be alone
We'll eventually grow up"
I communicate with one from from High School. life will steal our time. Maybe with Facebook and other things. People are better? I liked the poem. Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote
Posted 9 Years Ago
9 Years Ago
Thanks so much Coyote, It is true, we all grow up and in the process we miss friends from the past, .. read moreThanks so much Coyote, It is true, we all grow up and in the process we miss friends from the past, but we meet new ones, but someday they'll go too.
Thanks for the great review, you're reviews are always appreciete it
Growing up is something everybody has to do, and sometimes, during that transition, friendships are lost and we can end up drifting away from our families. However, we can prevent anything from ever happening to our relationships if we just try to keep them up and running. Once again Lizardo, you have done a fantastic job with this poem. I could feel quite a few different emotions behind the words; happiness(very slightly), sadness, and dare I say a little bit of anger? It's not easy to incorporate many emotions into one single poem, but you've managed to do it quite well here. Keep it up, my friend :)
Thanks Dan :) Hapiness, yeah kind of, sadness and yeah a bit of anger because I feel like sometimes .. read moreThanks Dan :) Hapiness, yeah kind of, sadness and yeah a bit of anger because I feel like sometimes people try to change you to become like them, but they'll end up alone if they go doing that to everyone.
Thanks dan :) I have question though, should I make it rhyme a little? so it can have a nice flow?
9 Years Ago
Some poems really do better with more focus on getting the emotions out than trying to rhyme. If yo.. read moreSome poems really do better with more focus on getting the emotions out than trying to rhyme. If you tried to rhyme this now, it might seem contrived, and would detract from the emotional charge of the poem. So I would say leave it as it is now :)
And then the day comes when you all reach maturity (I did too) and realize that it's not all about being like everyone else, that there's a lot of satisfaction in individuality...that everyone CAN be different and still be together, NOT alone. The day one realizes that all the youthful worry was pointless is the day one feels comfortable in one's own skin. Then one is ready for life as it really is. take care...dan
Posted 9 Years Ago
9 Years Ago
Your wisdom is good dan, I like it. Maybe, because I'm thinking of this maybe because I'm in that pr.. read moreYour wisdom is good dan, I like it. Maybe, because I'm thinking of this maybe because I'm in that process, leaving everything behind to grow up and become 'me'.
Thanks for the review dan :) you are always appreciete it
It has a lyrical quality to it Lizardo. It brimming with positivity (no surprise there) and straight talking.
This line really resonated with me -
"...treat yourself like
King " - okay, I will. :))
If Tyler Durden had a sunnier outlook then he might have started Right Club instead of Fight Club and read this manifesto at the start of the alternative movie. Cool one my friend.
Posted 9 Years Ago
9 Years Ago
Thanks Anto :) It is good to see you visiting here :)
I mean its true because we usualy trea.. read moreThanks Anto :) It is good to see you visiting here :)
I mean its true because we usualy treat ourself like trash or something worse when we are something beautiful. everyone is, we just don't realized it.
Thanks for the review my friend