Prologue

Prologue

A Chapter by Lizardo
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The start of the story

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“So the cold war was name ‘’cold’’ because they never used weapons against each other, it was actually like the thing we use when we’re mad at someone, the cold law or something? That you don’t speak with them but yet you’re mad at them…”

Mr. David was teaching the social studies to the class in a PowerPoint presentation.

The class room was dark with the only source of light being the presentation about the cold war; seats were all over the place with whispers from the teens talking to each other, and some we’re paying close to attention to what Mr. David was teaching, while others were lost in their worlds, Like Charles Remington, a young boy who’s age is 15. A tall boy with a tan skin who would wear a black jacket and blue jeans to school, his eyes were brown and his hair was dark.

Charles was drawing an airplane while Mr. David was teaching the class, for Charles, what Mr. David was saying was miles and miles away, like whispers coming to his ears.

He was smart, but lazy to study at the same time. He always would dream about going to great adventures through the world and meeting new people in the way, but what he really wanted was to find himself.

At a young age, Charles didn’t know who he was and why was in this life, as a matter of fact, he was a philosopher too.

A young fearful boy who wanted to defeat everything he fear and be someone who people would look up to in the future, be part of history…

“As a matter of fact, that’s why Charles is going to detention right now!” Yelled Mr. David grabbing Charles attention.

Everyone started to laugh at Charles.

“You can leave the class now Charles, I’m pretty sure you don’t your class mates making fun of you right?”

The class started to laugh again.

Charles put everything in his backpack and went out of the classroom.

In the distance you could hear Mr. David trying to calm down the class with their laughter reverting through the hallway.

Charles walked through the hallway, lockers on each side and the sound of his steps vibrating through the hallway; he didn’t have time to think about what just happened, but he did regret not defending himself from Mr. David

He finally got to the Detention room.

He opened the door. Mrs. Nicole was sitting in a chair with a desk In front of her. The room was full of chairs stack in five lines, each one after the other.

In one chair, George, One of Charles’s friend was sitting with his legs crossed looking at the ceiling, on the other end of the room was Michael. Michael was a kind of tall young man, but no taller than Charles, whose age was 15 too. His skin color was white with green eyes and blonde hair.

“Will you look at that, we have the dynamic trio in this room” Said Mrs. Nicole in a sarcastic tone.

“Ha! High Five!” Said George

I was pass him and gave him my hand, I sat down in a chair all the way at the back

“Not feeling good today?” Asked Michael

Charles just nodded.

The minutes seem to be decades as time went on, but at last 3 PM came and it was time to go.

He walk out of the detention room, pass by some people that were putting books in their lockers and to the front door.

The sun was shining bright, it was 95 F outside.

There were palm trees on each side and grass on the back of them while were Charles was walking was all pavement. The street was in front of the school too.

A red car started to hunk while it parked on the street.

Charles started to walk towards the car, he opened the door.

A man was driving the car; it was Charles’s father wearing a black coat.

“The principle called me” He said as the car started to go from the school.

“What happened this time?” he asked

“I drew an airplane and got lost in my dreams again” Charles said looking out the window.

It’s something that Charles loved to do, watch how the cars and people pass by his eyes. He always would wonder of their lives and hope the best for them.

“Remember what I told you, Charles” Said his father looking at him while the car stopped in the red light of the traffic lights.

“It’s good to dream, it’s the best thing you could do”

“But the best thing you could do is fulfill them”

The traffic light turned green and the car started to run again.

 



© 2015 Lizardo


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Some of your sentences are very good. You seem to also bring the reader along and into your tale. Kathie

Posted 9 Years Ago


Lizardo

9 Years Ago

Thank you so much Kathie for your kind words and review
This was bizarre and surreal. It was a great start that made me go ‘what… the f**k?’ in a good way. It was sweet, yet eerie, and fucked up, yet enthralling. I DID just watch A Serbian Film, so this was weirdly good timing to read such as story. My mind frame was in the proper place, anyways. The comparison between her and a cow was disturbing, but spot on. Not only did it add to the weird, uncomfortable feeling of this short horror story, but it also got me thinking of deeper stuff (such as how we would feel so different about butchering a cow, as opposed to a human, but why?).

Suggestions:
~ “Her plump teets” Teats.
~ “bloodpool” Blood pool.

Nitpicks:
~ “There she lies; on all fours, masticating, gazing at me silently with her big, pulchritudinous eyes; young and beautiful.” I don’t think either of the semicolons are really needed here, though I don’t think they are used incorrectly. I would change it maybe to: “There she lies on all fours, masticating, and gazing at me silently with her big, pulchritudinous eyes. She was young and beautiful.”
~ “gargles warm red crimson” ‘Red crimson’ is redundant. Crimson is a shade of red.

Posted 9 Years Ago


Lizardo

9 Years Ago

Okay thank you so much! I'm glad you could read it
so true but dreams never come true..... when dreams become ur ambitions then they become ur reality... so first make ur dreams ur ambition charles........ charles is the name of a prince I love the most...... Do you know cinderella... he is her prince

Posted 9 Years Ago


Lizardo

9 Years Ago

Yeah I know her, this is a new Idea I had too, I've always dreamed of going to a great adventure.
Daisy

9 Years Ago

good luck then....
This is really good so far. I can't wait to see how the story will progress:)

Posted 9 Years Ago


Lizardo

9 Years Ago

Thank you so much Aless, I'm glad you liked it :)
Cool Girl

9 Years Ago

You're welcome:)
This is a good start to a story. I'm really interested to see what direction you go with this one. Going on an adventure is something I think most, if not all, of us want to do when we're young. It's a good strategy to write a story based off of something that many people can relate to. I look forward to reading more of this! :)

Posted 9 Years Ago


Lizardo

9 Years Ago

Thank you so much Dan! I know right? Everyone wants to go in an adventure where they can find themse.. read more
DoormanDan

9 Years Ago

Right, I know for a fact that I want to go on an adventure :)

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