I Drive Fast In My Car

This is very random

Time to get out of here

I'll drive fast in my car

And never look back

Far away

From the endless streets

I don't drive the car

I make the car drive itself

In the Underground road

Where dreams come true

I'll go fast in my car

And drive far away

Before night sets

At the end of my sleep

There's a race to the sky

Who is going to get there first?

The winner will win the eternal sleep

While the looser will get the endless dream

I go fast in my car

And never look back

Drive far away from the street

And raise my hand up to the sky

I'll drive fast in my car

Before night sets

At the end of my sleep

Author's Note

Tried something new ( I think it didn't worked but I wanted to see what you guys think)

Reviews

[DoormanDan]

You tried something new, and I can tell you with absolute certainty that it paid off TREMENDOUSLY. I don't think there is a single person on this planet that can't relate to this poem at some point in their lives. We all want to drive fast in our cars at some point. Honestly, this is quite a creative piece you've written! :)

[Lizardo]

Thank you so much Dan! and it's true, at some point we all want some situations in life to go fast

[Vishuddha]

I am getting a dream - going faster than anyone, any time, ever. But, the underground road, where dreams come true ties that dream to, well, truth, reality, the raw, rough and ready, real world. Then, a race to the sky ... trying to get into heaven ... at the end of my sleep ... at the end of my life, which is a sort of dream when you're on the other side ... the car crash is missing, but, who would want to remember that part anyway? It must have been a head on collision - well, at least there were two involved, not like a tree or a wall, because I've got a winner and a looser and it doesn't sound like anybody is going to wake up, what with endless sleep and eternal dreams. Maybe you're driving too fast for me. Or, am I just dreaming? It was a wild ride and I enjoyed it. Can somebody, please, tell me what's going on?

[Lizardo]

That is a tremendous good write if you put in other words!

[CA Anurag Sharma]

never read something like this....unique... good write

[Lizardo]

Thank you so much!

[Vanesa Markovic]

I like the simple car metaphor for something deeper.
Well written!
-VM

[Lizardo]

Thank you so much, I really appreciete your kind words

[Stephen]

I liked it.

There's a race to the sky
Who is going to get there first?
The winner will win the eternal sleep
While the looser will get the endless dream

I would love a writer's commentary on what this stanza mean't to you whenever you wrote it because I feel that this is the most important stanza that makes up the meaning of the whole poem.

[Lizardo]

Well, I thought about how we all go to heaven and how everyone is hoping to go there
''There's a race to the sky''
But who is going to get their first, kind of means like, who is going to make the best thing for the world?
The winner will get the eternal sleep, when we someday go to heaven we'll have an eternal rest from the events that happened in earth
While the loose will get the endless dream, Is like saying: the one who makes the worst stuff for the world would be trapped in a dream
I appreciete your review, thank you a lot :)

[Stephen]

Ok, I understand it now, I thought along those lines, but I wasn't 100% sure. Thanks for explaining it to me. Great poem!!!

[Lizardo]

You are welcome and thank you for reading and reviewing! means a lot!

[Stephen]

no problem

[Jennesis]

I think it works. There is a sentiment about running away that is present throughout. Maybe a little polish needed but the theme works.

[Lizardo]

Thank you so much, I really appreciete it

[Cool Girl]

I like then idea! Trying something new is good. You never know unless you try:) it isn't your best piece, but I still enjoyed it. Sorry I wasn't on all day :p

[Lizardo]

Don't worry :) And thank you so much!

[Cool Girl]

You're welcome!

[Laura Lynn]

A lovely idea, to be going so fast it seems the car drives itself, to race in the "Underground road to dreams"

[Lizardo]

Thank you so much! I really appreciete it

[Marie]

Interesting. A race to the sky, and yoy can win it, if you drive fast enough. But it sounds like a dream.

[Lizardo]

True, very true Thank you so much for your review Marie

[Sami Khalil]

Fast cars and fast fun along with random writes. Bravo........................

[Lizardo]

Thank you so much Sami, I really appreciete it

[Sami Khalil]

You are welcome...:)...................