One Last Time- A Poem With Cool Girl

This Time, I will go just don't do what you did to me

This time I wonder

If I'm going to do things right

No more backing up

I need to move fordward this time

This time everything has to go

According to the plan

Times will scape

At least I want to live my life

Im not one to move on

And that I regret

But I must get my head

Away from my past

From time to time 

I wonder about you

How you hurted me in my heart

From time to earth

I wonder about you

what could be of you

After all of this years?

This time everything has to go according to the plan

Time is scaping right now

And I don't have much time in here

I want to see you one last time

of what became of you

I can't explain my feelings

I miss you too much

You're the only thing I can think about

But at the same time I dislike you

For making me feel this way

I just wish I could hold you

For one more day

I see you in the trees

In the stars

In the flowers

Smiling back at me

Or laughing at my sorrow

I try to close my eyes

So that I can see clearly

But it just doesn't work

This is what you did to me

Time is scaping

I see light at the end of this tunnel

Just remember what you did to me

Don't do what you did to me another one

See you in the after life

My best friend

Author's Note

I did this poem with my good friend Cool Girl, I hope you all like it

Reviews

[jemaral]

I'm getting too many emotions from the piece... There's regret and moving on and anger and a bit of melancholy and a few others making the poem quite rich emotion wise which is always great for a any piece but it feels decentralized and I am having trouble getting a grasp on the core of the piece without intricately examining the phrases... Especially on the third stanza "hurted" I'm not sure if that's a proper word and a few more phrases in that stanza is a bit challenging. The fact that its a collaboration may be a big factor contributing to the quirks of the piece... This piece is like the ore version of a precious metal its a bit rough but a bit of polishing it can be exquisite. Collaborating is easier said than done taken that into account the resulting piece is above what one would expect from a collaboration of non professional authors... Kudos Guys!!!

[Pushkar Prabhat]

Cool Collab.......
very coherent.......
emotional and honest....
beautifully done...
i liked it!!!
:)

[Stephen]

I can relate to this poem. awesome job. I had an heartfelt undertone to it. For those that are able to relate, it was able to convey in words what someone may not have been able to express otherwise. Some people do not have the ability to express in words what they feel, but use others writings to help them do so. I believe that this is one of those poems that may have a lot of meaning to a lot of people that have experienced the same thing. Good stuff! Thanks for sharing your expression.

[Matching Socks]

You guys did a great job, collaborations can be tough but you've made it seem effortless.
Well done to both of you.

[Lizardo]

Thank you so much

[Emily]

Nice wording!
Keep it up!!

[Lizardo]

Thank you so much

[Chain of Hearts]

Very meaningful! Word by word I feel it's meaning. This reminds me so much of events that have happened in my life. Awesome poem, thanks for sharing!

[Lizardo]

Thank you so much

[Chain of Hearts]

Welcome! :)

[Confuser]

What a wonderful collaberation! I loved it, every word. It was so honest and sweet and sad, but it showed true feelings and a reminder for him never to hurt someone else. From time to earth...(I like a lot) I see you in the trees, the stars the flowers smiling back at me...must get my head away from the past. It is simply lovely. You guys need to do this again. Great poem! Thank you so much.

[Lizardo]

The line that you said was made by Cool girl
Thank you so much, I really appreciete it!

[Confuser]

I loved it all! I cannot copy/paste, computer savvy no/but it could just as well have been you. I loved it all!

[Moonlight]

Great work! It is an amazing piece. To say it is amazing is sort of an understatement! This poem brought back some memories that I have tried to suppress with great difficulty.... Never mind that! On the whole, you guys did a great job. Bing able to express with so much honesty and justice towards the theme is really worth appreciation. Keep Writing! :)

[Lizardo]

Thank you so much!

[Cool Girl]

Thanks, Moonlight!

[DoormanDan]

To say that I like it would be to understate and understated understatement! This poem is an example of poetry at its finest. The emotions bleed out of every word. You two did great with writing this one! Bravo! :)

[Lizardo]

Thank you so much Dan, we really appreciete it :)

[Cool Girl]

Thanks, Dan! It means a lot coming from you:)

[DoormanDan]

No problem! :)}

[Cool Girl]

YES! You officially just called me your good friend! XD
I love this poem, not just because I partially wrote it, but because it is so meaningful:)

[Lizardo]

I know right? hahahaha xD

[Lizardo]

It has a lot of meaning behind it

[Cool Girl]

XD yes indeed