The Old House

I had a fear of this house

The memories started to rise to the sky

Showing how was everything before

My heart started pouding  faster

When I saw the reflection of my love one in the foutain

The ghostly voice came to say my name

I started to run

The Old house was bringing me

All of those memories

the ghost came to me and said

''Don you remember me?''

I was perplex by the event

I nodded and started to run another room

The events came rushing to my head again

When we used to play and kiss in this old house

But she had a tragic event

I never saw her again

Although I'm scare of her

It brings me joy to see her face again

The wind started to bring some windows down

Soon it will over

She came again and grabbed my hand

It was something I couldn't described

she led me out of the house and said

''I love you'' 

I was dying from the fear

But saw her ghostly face

Smiling at me

I smile back

And my soul wen't happily to heaven

Saw her in a white room

She smile at me 

and hugged me

And spoke:

''We brought our sinking ship back to shore''

Reviews

[NeiL ArandA]

All things the good the bad the ugly and the not so happy moments are all part of our collective memories. It is who we are and what molds and define us. Our unique memories made us different as an individual. If its not for those pleasant and unpleasant experiences I have encountered early on in life . I would not have been able to appreciate what I have now and what have been given to me.

[Lizardo]

I those take time to appreciete, even I in my years I know how it is to suffer, but that is the past and the past is past, we should look to the future

[Sami Khalil]

This poem grabs you and pulls you in to enjoy the totality of the scenery and the characters at play even if they are ghosts or ghostly...Bravo.................

[Lizardo]

Thank you so much Sami, I really appreciete it

[Sami Khalil]

You are welcome muchly...:).................

[Clockwork]

I like where you are going with this one. As jacob said, your imagery is beautiful and haunting. I really liked the detail about your speaker seeing the reflection of his love in the fountain. Your last line also is very haunting and potent.

I also agree with jacob about the edits.

You show some promising skills in this poem. I like how you develop the story in this poem, and how your craft your images.

[Lizardo]

Thank you so much Clockwork, I really appreciete it!

[Clockwork]

You're welcome--I hope your love for poetry never fades.

[Lizardo]

It will never fade :)

[jacob erin-cilberto]

some ghosts just want peace, they are troubled, not scary...

needs editing, but contains some beautiful and haunting imagery.

jacob

[Lizardo]

Thank you so much Jacob, I'll fix those problems

[Cool Girl]

I like the ending so much! It is such a beautiful piece!

[Lizardo]

Thamk you so much!

[Lizardo]

Thamk you so much!

[Cool Girl]

You're welcome!