Walking through Sorrow

As i made my way through the 

Dark and silent street

With the gust in within

You feel sad that 

Nobody is walking with you

In the Silent way that seems

To  have no ending

Sorrounded by trees

The trees make an arch all the way

There is a full moon

And the stars shine like never before

The way seems to have no ending

There is only one way, and that is

Down

As i walk through it,

I don't feel emotions

I just think of life itself

With my head on the ground

i watch the way

I don't hope for anything to happen

I just hope that i can get away from here

The light of the moon fades in the distance

And the way seems to darken more

witch makes me more depressed

Is their a way home?

How do i get out?

I start crying, i dont think anyone can understand what

I'm feeling at the moment

Feeling sad but at same time,

Emontionless

The way goes deeper down

Until I see a cliff

I walk towards it

And watch the darkness

Of the abism

But when i take a step down...

Someone kept me from falling...

And that was Jesus reaching at me

When i needed him most

Reviews

[Ragini]

Wow, nice ending. :) Great job!! :)

[Lizardo]

Thank you!

[Laura Lynn]

I think I can see the figure here slowly walking across a scene with all these pitfalls and downplays; I don't know about Jesus reaching at you, what you can do to make that seem more plausible, does it have to be Jesus per se named like that or can it just be the description of a youngish to middle aged man with longish hair? Do we need to depict him, or what, I don't know, the abysmal cliff and Absalom and the abbess's abyss...hell was down there, I guess Jesus was just doing what had been done for him before with the temptation, when he was on the cliff and Satan said he would give him all the riches but don't test they said, don't doubt the heavenly father creator who made you or you will not be rewarded in heaven, I don't get that now, though it is shameful to admit, what does it mean to not test God, what happened on the cliff and turning the stone to bread? but he can turn water to wine? but then, ok, maybe it was not the vine but they were just as happy with the water

[Lizardo]

Wise words, very wise words, i like them

[Cool Girl]

I really like it, especially that last stanza!

[Lizardo]

Thank you a lot! as i said to Brian, i'm planning on writing a story about this poem

[Cool Girl]

That's good! And you're welcome:)

[Brian M. Peeples]

I really, really loved the emotion that went with the story. Very well-written, and I felt like I could read this over and over. Very well done!

[Lizardo]

Thank you! i am planning of starting a story with this poem. it's kind of the start to see how well it goes.

[Brian M. Peeples]

Awesome! Can't wait to read it!