The Prophecy

A prophecy spoken long ago by the Ancients and all but forgotten today...

“Torrea will be challenged by the rising of a terror and the falling of a hero.

An encounter will lead to the gates opening and the release of great evil.

Leading to hell’s fire and the end of the world.

 

Torrea shall be saved by the rise of a hero.

Chosen by Zarricknek, the wielder of lightning.

And granted the power to become an eternal Protector.

 

Setting out on a quest to gather the Lost and reclaim a love.

Will lead to a journey into the reaches of the Unknown.

Which will uncover a path that can save Torrea.”

  

Author's Note

I need help, this is a crucial part to my story and I want to make sure that it sounds interesting, makes sense, and is prophecy-ish! All help welcome, I may use your idea or change it but I may not also. Thanks!

Reviews

[Nienor Niniel]

I might suggest changing the first stanza to present tense. (Since it's a prophecy, that might give it a tone of certainty -- talking about things in the future as if they've already happened or are happening.) Or maybe reducing the first line to just "The rising of a terror and the falling of a hero."

The other stanzas sound good to me. It might make sense to capitalize the 'l' in love if Lost is going to be, too.

I'll be looking forward to more of this story.

[Joshua Hunter]

Thanks for the ideas, but the prophecy was written/spoken centuries before it will actually take place in this story. Knowing that do you still think it should be changed?

[Nienor Niniel]

Now that I read it again, I'm not so sure lol.... It does seem good as is.

[Joshua Hunter]

lol, sweet, thanks for the comment thou. It was a good one and it made me think and reread it!