I don't usually write much poetry but there are a few ideas that are bouncing around in my head. So I will put them on paper and hope someone enjoys them. This is an issue I think everyone struggles with, we all have our own demons.
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Yes, we all have our battles with our demons. I enjoyed your poem, and I'm sure plenty of people will find it relatable. I'm guessing Him is God?
Most enjoyable write. Keep it up :)
Yes we all have struggles we go through and want it to go away and not torture us anymore. We often try to do it on our own thinking we can handle it and are strong enough, but in reality we just get deeper and deeper into a hole that we can't get out of by our selves. It's good to know that He loves us and will help us if we look to Him and give Him our struggles and hardships to bare.
I love the simplicity about this and how it's left up to interpretation. This way it can make the reader think and mean different things to them. It will get through to more people that way.
Posted 11 Years Ago
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11 Years Ago
Thanks, that's kind of what I was going for, different means for different people.
I would elaborate more on how this person took the demons away. Maybe some longer metaphor about battling demons and this person was the only one with the cure to getting rid of yours. I liked it, I just feel it would be even better with that added. Seems, like this guy just swooped in and took them away. Un less that is really what happened, and then nevermind. lol Everyone is different with this kind of thing. With me, no one has even tried to get rid of the nasty demons in my head so I feel that if someone even tried, that it would definitely be a battle because I am pretty stubborn with my illness. :) Great write! I loved it. Keep it up!
Posted 11 Years Ago
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
11 Years Ago
Thanks, I'm glad you enjoyed it. And He does simply just take them away, but you are right I need to.. read moreThanks, I'm glad you enjoyed it. And He does simply just take them away, but you are right I need to specify that He just took away without a fight.
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