Why Do I Care

A poem about thinking about and wanting someone you've only seen once.

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I’m so vain

But I can’t think straight.

When I think of you.

My Heartbeats shakes.

So tell me the cure to you.

The cure to us.

Because I don’t want.

But I need.

To know your name.

To see the moments.

 

You haunt my dreams.

And taunt my wake.

I close my eyes.

I can no longer wait.

Will I see you again?

Will you be there?

I can barely wonder.

Why do I care?

 

 

Author's Note

just want to know what you think

Reviews

[cilla]

I think what you have is a very good start on an interesting idea. Love at first sight may sound a bit chiche' but still holds true. And, it is quite maddening because we can't figure out why we feel the way we do but still that feeling is undeniable.

I do think you need to do some work on this but you've laid a good foundation ... the second verse being much stronger than the first. Spend some time with it ... read other people's poetry ... especially those about love and being lesbian. and remember, writers write so that is what you should be doing.

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[Quickbeam]

Nice Poem. Someone who falls fleetingly in love with someone, you don't really know, but hope to. We've all been there.

[quandary]

I like, but... "My Heartbeats shakes?"