Restricted Star

Now I see you, now I don’t. It was nothing but a blink, yet it was everything.

I must break out of this normality

The box has me tucked in tight

The anonymity seems to unfold me

Yet I continue confined in this fight

 

To be heard and not seen, unknown

Is clearly not what drives me

Then why must I seek to be known?

When to be known is not relatively free?

 

This drives the star to insanity.

It shines so bright it has a name.

Abnormality confining

Joy lost to a straitjacket of flashes.

 

The velocity of it all so overwhelming

To be unseen it must completely disappear

The gravity of the situation alarming

For they had already been gone light years ago.

 

All that remains is everything and yet nothing

The memory of the star so bright

Falling and burning within a blink

Releasing confinement to grand perspective.

Little Mouse

June 25, 2011

Reviews

[Jordan's Back]

The Poem, Hell Where do i start. The Expressions here are wonderful, Comparing the soul, to a star and its confinement into the Status quo of society box, The struggle of individuality one face when trying to become more than the the worlds whims being "Lost to the Straightjacket of flashes". The way things seems to move ever so fast, like a romance, that was over with before it started, being gone light years ago. and the Fact Remains, Life and death The Only true constant. I don't know maybe I hit it wrong, but This is what I got from it. Also, The Rhythm and flow of the piece is so fluidic it makes you want to read it several times, and it also has a core within that spirals out causing more and more of a deeper meaning with every stanza. a Truly remarkable piece, and i look forward to reading more of your Outstanding musings.

[decemberalways]

Ahhh loved this! As I was immediately drawn to this by my infinite love for stars, I am surprised by its analogy to a conflicted state of being. "Then why must I seek to be known/When to be known is not relatively free?" — Clever use of words that especially ring true.

[PurpleQuartz]

I really liked this! I thought it was clever and written very well.

[Hamza]

excellent work ...
and nice lines these ..
"All that remains is everything and yet nothing
The memory of the star so bright"

[Athina]

i love the rymings of every sentence and nice words are used. good poem

[Sami Khalil]

To be unseen
it must completely
disappear.
Nice write.

[Seshat Nidaba]

The first and last stanzas were truly excellent, considering you went for rhyming, this was truly quite original.

[Eagle Cruagh]

Nice poem.
Not in to stars much, they seem
out of my league, but for your
sake I will read it again and try to
shine a bit.
Beautiful story,
------ Eagle Cruagh