Virtual Word

The agony of writing something that takes too long to post.

Living in this virtual word

I can’t eat I’m drawn to you

Pouring yet another glass of whine

Yes, I’m fine, though I am dwindling away

No worries my thighs are still fat, drats!

And why can’t “drats” be plural, it can, so screw that!

 

Read into my every vague or misplaced word

Too bad I’m not anonymous

Virtual trail in all I do

I’m here to walk this winding path

Getting better with every word I write

Yet addicted to my music shuffle

Asking questions of it all day

Should I post this now or should I delay?

 

And maybe while I’m at it

I’ll post all those lonely others too

And mix them with my masterpieces

Free them from their trap of reread/review

 

But W A I T…

 

My OBSESSIVE ORDER COMPULSION takes over

Bringing me to yet another break

 

Though I really didn’t want to stop to eat

Luckily my self-contained peaches

Had not reached their expiration date!

 

Quickly getting me back to this

To post while I’m insane!

This one rescued from the folder…

“maybe post someday”.

 

And now that I’ve addressed my self-made OOC

I’m in a freeing mood

This jailhouse rock no longer frustrating

Heading for poetic release

As I take it to the limit, several times.

 

 

 

 

Little Mouse

March 13, 2008

Author's Note

This should be in the "reread/rewrite maybe post someday" folder, now I'm certain. It's simply a mess. For that matter perhaps an exercise to put things in that bucket titled, um, trash, not recycle, certainly not post. A writing about writing, classically doomed. Maybe I'll delete it tomorrow.

Reviews

[siri]

well i must say your trash is my treasure this is one of my favorite pieces i have read on this site and i will deff be putting this in my favorites folder! im in love with your writing style your mind is a piece of art....no not just a piece of art but a delicate one at that. thanks for the read! i enjoyed it so much.
awesome
awesome
awesome
awesome

yes those last four words are a must to put in in this review

f*****g awesome!

[cheynicole]

Don’t delete it! I like it. I feel the procrastination and constant doubt of the quality my writing all the time. This is far greater than you think. I love the 2nd to last line "Heading for poetic release". Post more.

chey

[Nicholas Hallows]

Procrastination is a b***h! I definitely don't think this poem is deserving of the 'trash' folder though. The first stanza is by far my favourite. It stands apart from the rest to me and is a poem in its own rights. I like its word play and rhyme... maybe that could have been developed more in the rest of the poem. Even if you think this is a mess, it's still a lot better than so much I have read on here that definitely should have been trashed.

[M Lamont]

OK, I am not one to trash anything. Think of musicians who record stuff and never release it then years later do a "Rarities Collection"?

As for this piece, the third line set the mood for me "Pouring yet another glass of whine". At first I thought it a typo but then it just put in the place of complining and confusion. I liked the feeling of diarray, self-aware of what was and was not happening for you.

Leave it, Share it and take what feedback comes your way for future writings!