Losing Love

Losing Love

A Poem by Little Mouse
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I keep trying to lose you, I've misplaced you as best I can

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My love doesn’t go away
Even though I pray every day
I keep trying to lose you
I’ve misplaced you as best I can

There you are again
Not even the littlest bit tucked away
Despite how much I try
Tomorrow’s another day

Shall I attach you to another?
Tie you to a whale and send it away?
Or hitch you to a donkey?
And let you sit and wail away?

All to find you return
In another form someday?

To lose it seems so fatal
But in death there is rebirth
Like a phoenix from the ashes
It doesn’t reside in your favorite shirt

Perhaps I should not lose you
There’d be nothing left to gain
But a empty space where you resided
So I’m holding out my hand


Little Mouse
October 18, 2007
 

© 2020 Little Mouse


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I love the line, "I've misplaced you as best I can." What a wonderfully descriptive sentence. The poem moves well and has good structure. Reminds me of some old Paul Simon lyrics:
She is visibly forgotten
as she slips into my pocket with my car keys
She says you've taken me for granted
because I please you
Wearing these diamonds on the soles of my shoes.
Shananana.

Posted 16 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Nice job here! Yeah, I know the background, but I put that away and re-read it and it is excellent. There is a bit of humor to the tone and the rhyming takes away what could be a bit of biting to the piece. Keep writing on this topic...its good!

Posted 16 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.


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