Away

i hope you can guess it :):D

Away.

Far From the thrush of cold air, and

the persistent call of nature,

hide-- trying to hide,

a creature; pallid, minuscule

inside a shell,

a lethargic snail

wrapped in a lucid light.

Eye lids ;

half-closed, half-opened

watching the senseless.

When the hostility surges

to freeze the moment,

the wrath gets tighter not to reveal

where the tasteless fluids merge with the life,

the ward conscious in sleep.

A kick- discreet, unheard

conceives the life intact.

The ovular and the bloody,

the colour of hatred feeding peace.

Reviews

[José Humilde]

Very nice poem! Again, great imagery. It's a fresh approach at an ageless subject. :) Life is a beautiful thang. :)

Thanks for sharing!

-JH

[JENY]

Hi dear….
I couldn’t make out the feeling….
Beneath your lines….
Would you please clarify?
But I liked your choice of words…..
And …..its good…..

[indu]

Lolz @ Ed :)

[PadfootBlack]

Splendid. Simply.... lovely to read.

[SamBug]

This was very good. Thanks for sharing!!!

[DeadToTheWorld]

this was truly amazeing :) i loved to read it great job

[Ed Hart]

i think it will take me about nine months to figure this out