June

written a long time ago.

The shadow of the rainy season missing.
The breeze that ought to touch
my skin and yours,missing.
The prolonged love grudges gone;
the June is in misery.

Reviews

[alesuriko]

The flow could use a little work and you forgot to put a space after the comma in the third line. But otherwise it was a good poem to read. Interesting take on June, really shows the perspectives in life.

[deeps]

interesting write, enjoyable read.

[José Humilde]

As I write this review, it is actually raining outside, ha. :)

I like your line breaks in this peace, nice smooth flow, easy to read...perfect for me!

Nice subject matter, I find it very relatable!

Thanks for sharing!

-JH

[indu]

jeny, my fellow keralite..for u and me..june calls for the rain, na?
For me,without rain, June is empty. thats y :)

[JENY]

Why this June is described in such …..aridness…
I like your short, pithy…..strokes…..
It is very touching and beautiful……

[Ed Hart]

life just tosses us around, then we stand in line waiting for the next ride

[PadfootBlack]

Gorgeous. Great job. LOVE the line:
"The prolonged love grudges gone"

[DeadToTheWorld]

this was a great write :) I enjoyed reading this good job