Thirty Nine

pure punishment 

Beautiful 

rare

Reason cause

naked

Purpose

Use what you have

until you cannot 

Name it

....  everyone has a purpose

here for

nothing truly here is worthless

everything comes from some reason

count for me

show us all your depth

even if you don't

count so deep

Die for me

kill for us

Do what it takes

to understand the math

Make me follow

show me why

how we care for us

why it could be worse

what it means to end

in the same exact way

i kill myself

To wake again

Author's Note

Reviews

[R.J Calzonetti (Siniste..]

I really enjoyed this, the last two lines ended what you had to say pretty much perfectly. And I liked the poem as a whole as well. I’ve been writing something lately but it’s mainly s**t. I’m wondering if it’s even worth sharing. This poem shows that you still have the aptitude for growth, as it is better than most others of yours. I like most of those as well, but this takes the cake

[Davidgeo]

Thanks man.

I'm glad you enjoyed the ending. This poem is trash without those last two lines.

And as far as you writing something that you think is s**t... well... post it anyway. It's hard to judge yourself when you keep it to yourself. Sharing things, even if they don't get feedback, forces yourself to look at them in a different way. Even the s**t. You'll find that you can critique yourself in a more objective way if you first put it out there.

Don't hold back. There's no real reason to hold back. Release yourself. Yes. Some of it's not going to work, most of it is not going to work, but, that's not the point. Even objectively speaking... cost/benefit analysis... if you wanna know if you can write, well, you first have to write openly and unabashedly. If only to show yourself what you can do.

Post your "s**t". F**k the consequences...

[R.J Calzonetti (SinisterPotatoe)]

You’re right. Even if it’s not good, I might as well try. I’ll take a second look at it and finish it, and then I’ll post it. If it still sucks then, well, I guess I’ll just have to accept it. Better than scraping something that has some degree of potential.

[Davidgeo]

Treat the world as your notebook. Feedback is feedback... good or bad, it is informative. But like I said earlier, openly posting is still mostly for yourself. If you keep things to yourself you will never truly critique yourself. Don't be afraid to expose yourself. It makes you stronger. It breeds within you a strength that no one can take away.

[R.J Calzonetti (SinisterPotatoe)]

I’ll definitely remember that. You’re absolutely right.