Seems to reflect the struggle of consciousness over aeons against the constraints of its physicality. There is a desire of the part to encompass the whole, which is, of course, impossible. The last few lines seem to be an effort to come to terms with the limitations. Perhaps, though just acknowledging them is a first step toward transcending them through non-resistance.
Posted 4 Years Ago
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
4 Years Ago
I think it's better not to consider our 'archeological' past on a regular basis unless youre specifi.. read moreI think it's better not to consider our 'archeological' past on a regular basis unless youre specifically looking at the past with specific intentions. It doesn't make sense to merge the deep past, or even the deep future; it inherently ignores the present in the moment. When taken all at once, and although probably closer to the truth, it hinders our ability to live in the present efficiently. And I mean like, over tens to hundreds of thousands of years... it's hard to make sense of things clearly that way; the picture we have is inherently unclear. Modern history is not what I'm talking about.
You've posited a challenge to other writers to see who might convey pain more abstractly. I doubt you could remove any meaning from this poem without deleting the work altogether
(i know you're just doing this to leave me a 1/100 rating.... do you fucktards not yet realize how l.. read more(i know you're just doing this to leave me a 1/100 rating.... do you fucktards not yet realize how little I care about s**t like that?)
4 Years Ago
Maybe use a different cadence or general disposition between your multiple profiles? It would make .. read moreMaybe use a different cadence or general disposition between your multiple profiles? It would make it seem less obvious that you're just making up profiles to shitpost. Douchepick.
How about, under pact of non aggression, you follow up with two couplets of your own and see if we c.. read moreHow about, under pact of non aggression, you follow up with two couplets of your own and see if we can’t find some sort of collaboration
4 Years Ago
How about... I just do my own thing and tell you to go f**k yourself. I don't find you to be a wort.. read moreHow about... I just do my own thing and tell you to go f**k yourself. I don't find you to be a worthwhile enough writer to collaborate with. Which means you're severe trash because I'm mediocre at best. Feel free to stop pretending we're frenemies. I know what you really are and I want nothing to do with it.
4 Years Ago
Seriously kid, stop using other profiles to troll me. Buy a dog, get a job or find a friend in real.. read moreSeriously kid, stop using other profiles to troll me. Buy a dog, get a job or find a friend in real life.... this s**t is getting stupid and you need to take a very deep look at yourself.
Seems to reflect the struggle of consciousness over aeons against the constraints of its physicality. There is a desire of the part to encompass the whole, which is, of course, impossible. The last few lines seem to be an effort to come to terms with the limitations. Perhaps, though just acknowledging them is a first step toward transcending them through non-resistance.
Posted 4 Years Ago
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
4 Years Ago
I think it's better not to consider our 'archeological' past on a regular basis unless youre specifi.. read moreI think it's better not to consider our 'archeological' past on a regular basis unless youre specifically looking at the past with specific intentions. It doesn't make sense to merge the deep past, or even the deep future; it inherently ignores the present in the moment. When taken all at once, and although probably closer to the truth, it hinders our ability to live in the present efficiently. And I mean like, over tens to hundreds of thousands of years... it's hard to make sense of things clearly that way; the picture we have is inherently unclear. Modern history is not what I'm talking about.
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