Every One Thing Came

Everybody's broken
Some just hide it Better

Than other's who use it Proper

No one gets out Clean
Some just get there Faster

Than others who get out, Slower

Nothing ends in story
Some just get more lucky

Than others who live - Unfortunately 

Everything is taken

From that which came before us

Unto that which follows after...

Author's Note

Reviews

[Bridget McJane]

" Everybody's broken
Some just hide it Better"

This is painfully true. Some people can hide their pain behind a mask and you can never truly know who's in pain. Those who usually have the brightest of smiles suffer the most. Treat everyone with a level of respect and kindness because you truly will never know.

Keep writing friend.

[Andrew Nelson Stewart]

Nicely done. I felt a lot of truths prevailing it's own game of what naturally is and all we can do is accept things we cannot change. How you made everyday conversational ideas into a facilitated highway of thoughts and thinking to come to one exit that is hope. The reason being the line "Everything is taken
From that which came before us
Unto that which follows after..." speaks of struggles with pain and pessimistically lie proof taking me that (we are all returning) to quote from RUMi ... meaning some kind of glorious hell that human beings enjoy and suffer and then push off for their search for truth. Keep writing each line is very thought provoking some i agree with ... keep being awesome sincerely your friend in writing and life.

[Davidgeo]

Thank you sir.

Never forget, it's not hard to forget....

[Dara]

Life with all it's agony mixed with ecstasy..... sometimes it is just a matter of where you were born and what follows is out of our control. When I think of how some people suffer, it seems life is a mere toss of the dice as in the saying, "but for the grace of God go I". Although I do not think God hands out grace to a privledged few, it seems to be more luck of the draw. A very powerful, thought provoking write this is.

[KWP]

everybody is broken to a certain degree, yes ... the lessons come thick and fast if you allow them to. I was thinking, on the plane, there are those that seek out life, while others are happy watching it pass by, i reckon that must make life go at a slower pace. But for those who seek it, the have to learn to deal with whatever oncoming onslaught there is ... and that is wheere we find our true character ...nothing ever stays the same ...

[Intothemilkyway]

It's very nice how you just summed up a small part of what life is,that some people just get too much into their head that they forget that life is to be lived how it comes and make changes for better.
A rainy season doesn't last forever.

[Crowley]

This is just oozing truths and awesomeness. Just finished reading East of Arden and Grapes of Wrath and saw and thought so much about what you just wrote about. What a trip. Loved this.

[Crowley]

So I just wrote a piece, not poetry but short prose called This Land. That lines up a bit with yours if you get a chance. If not no worries. I really like the thread of thought in your piece.

[Davidgeo]

It'll take me a minute, but I'm definitely interested. It's a good thing to work off of someone else's thread, that's kinda the point of this poem anyway.

[Crowley]

I wrote it a couple days ago, but it just reminded me of what you were saying.

[Davidgeo]

Even better probably

[alanwgraham]

Nice Dave. I think you've done a good job of summing up the true nature of life. We think we have it all sussed but the truth is we just muddle through. Some of us just do a better job of hiding the mess we're in. You have some good humour in there too.
Cheers.
Alan

[Davidgeo]

Thanks Alan. That was extremely high praise.