in the dark with the lights on

in the dark with the lights on
Lived by, a thing that's catchy
To be followed, come with me
in the dark with the lights on
Naked, afraid cold and alone
Inside what the outside feels like
in the dark with the lights on

Is a bare mind inside a body

Following things, catchy things

in the dark with the lights on

  come with me, let me show you

the dark 

with the lights on

Author's Note

Reviews

[John the Baptist]

We are not told who the addressee is in this offering. It could be a single individual or everyone who reads the poem. A kind of invitation is given to accompany the speaker to come "Inside what the outside feels like/in the dark with the lights on". The titular line is repeated several times in the poem, indicating its importance. It sounds like the speaker wants the addressee to come inside his "bare'' mind to follow things, ''catchy things.'' This could mean some type of revelation, or it could be an effort to alleviate loneliness. The reader is left to decide.

[A Soap Mess Stories]

A catchy title to invite one into the darkness. Excellent write.

[drew garner]

kind of has a verse-chorus-verse repetition, but more like the wipers than a pop song. I don't really think I can say anything but I did enjoy it.

[Dara]

This darkness you write about is even more treacherous given it remains even when the "lights are on". Your words are so very descriptive and full of emotion, not easy to do but you have done it so well.

[Renaye]

Almost sounds like Lyrics! Love it!

[Chris Shaw]

A caged existence, in the dark with the lights on. An invitation to sample this sort of existence maybe? That's where you took me David. All good wishes.

Chris