In Hell

i will have company

because not everything

you can take back

because not everything

you can make right

because some things

will always be what they are

irreversible

for all

Author's Note

Reviews

[annalysiar]

Great piece.
Short and direct
I appreciate this write

[Robert Trakofler]

Look man so i killed three people, do you have any idea how much i gave to the united way last year? I got two Indulgences and my great uncle paid good money for them too, so what if he had a jar of dead Germans soldiers teeth, he left that along with his German officers pistol he took off of a dead soldier. You know he did go to seminary!

[Davidgeo]

Using levity to re-describe tragedy can be a lovely thing if you do it right; if you understand who and what you're talking to and about.

You're not as funny as you think you are in this moment. If only for joking about killing people. That s**t's just not funny in this instance. I get what you're trying to do but this is the wrong moment to do it in. Jack a*s.

[Robert Trakofler]

Gee sorry didn’t mean to hurt your feelings

[Robert Trakofler]

Wasn’t trying to use levity at all by the way everything I said was true

[Davidgeo]

You didn't "hurt" my feelings, you just made a jack a*s of yourself in a pretty stupid way that angers me. If you really hurt my feelings you'd probably not have gotten a response at all.

You killed three people, eh? Of course you did. You should probably stop saying stupid s**t now.

[Robert Trakofler]

I am a veteran my family has fought in every American war since the revolution. I read you cause you said some really great things about yourself on the group page. So I thought to myself this guy must be really good to be so confident about how great he is. So I read this poem and what I took from it was you speaking from the perspective of someone who is in hell so I gave an ironical response. You interpreted this as an affront but the truth is all I said was true all of it I was making fun of the bargaining people makes to justify themselves for doing things inherently wrong perhaps you didn’t get that?

[Davidgeo]

What unit did you serve with and where did you deploy?

[Robert Trakofler]

But judging from your reactions I don’t think you are worth any sort of discourse I guess those 5 other writers you found to be good on this sight must of said all the right things to you.

[Davidgeo]

You didn't answer my question mr "veteran". What unit/s did you serve with and where did you deploy?

[Davidgeo]

Do I have to start? C 1/377th, 101st, camp Taji 2004-06 B 1/320th, 101st camp Liberty 2007-08. Sgt David Demers.

[Davidgeo]

… it's all a matter of public record. You can verify that independently if you want.
read more… it's all a matter of public record. You can verify that independently if you want.

Which is probably the real reason you don't wanna talk about your "service". You and wordman should hang out, you can share tips on stolen valor tactics.

[Davidgeo]

Oh boy, it's so very surprising you decided not to respond to someone asking for proof of your military service. It's not like it's pretty much one of the simplest things a real vet could do... it's not like a real vet wouldn't be livid and chomping at the bit to disprove someone calling them out for stolen valor... ugh. You suck at life dude. As long as you stop pretending to be a real combat vet I'll let it go. Don't try and do that s**t again.

[Leviari]

great piece, very powerful and straightforward, simple in the wording but still fascinating.
Thank you for sharing, it was a very interesting read!

[Markus Anthony]

Sometimes we wish we can make things turn out the way we want them to but it doesn't go our way all the time. Your work rings of truth and a fact of life that which requires acceptance a lot of us.