Do It Right

hurt is not hurt

my doll it is learning

when you don't die

in the end

when you survive

grotesque

but alive. . .

　

i hate that i hate

and that i owe her the world

but i can't give her a thing

　

because i live in this dark

and she is nothing but light

and i am this thing...

Author's Note

Reviews

[Cherrie Palmer]

This reminds me of how my brother's felt when they got home from Vietnam. They had a hard time readjusting to family life. It took them awhile to make peace with the past, but I think they finally did before the end.

[Davidgeo]

Making peace always costs a little something indescribable. Not everyone can afford it, even after a lifetime. I'm glad they finally did. I don't know if I would be able to myself if I had to do the Vietnam thing, that was the last truly nasty large scale war for us. Nothing even close to it has been seen since in terms of regular US military combat. Your brothers were strong men and it seems they truly proved that in the very end.

[Cherrie Palmer]

I agree with that notion that strength or maybe
a new kind of courage to let the past go then turn that corner and move forward.

[Davidgeo]

Have you ever scene a movie called "Jacob's Ladder"?

[Cherrie Palmer]

I have not. I just watched the trailer for it.
It looks pretty heavy.

[Davidgeo]

It's very, unique. And not in a pretty way. I hated it the first time I watched it, even now, it's definitely not my favorite movie. But it's one of the better movies made on it's subject.

I wish I knew some things about it before I watched it for the first time. Normally I would never say that because I think it's important for the viewer to take their own interpretation from any sort of art. But this is one of those movies that is improved from knowing what you're about to watch beforehand; it's a very, very good movie but it hides it's meaning in the abstract too much so it's almost always underrated...

spend 20 minutes on this youtube video I'm linking below. It's something I really wish I saw before I watched it for the first time.

www.youtube.com/watch?v=7JltJ6Xoglo

[Davidgeo]

…. you might not need or want to watch the movie at all if you watch that youtube video. But I think you might find it extraordinarily interesting, especially because of your brothers.

[Cherrie Palmer]

I'll give it a look

[Meliss@k]

This reminds me of my ex and I

Very touching, yet also full of heartbreak. All in one.

[ImaginaryMight]

I hate poetry. I don't understand what the aim is "to be poetic". "Look at me, I'm so profound. How profound am I? I'm so profound that I'm not profound, I'm some quality that has not yet a name like a degree of profundity that is so severe it forms a paradox to destroy itself." I prefer songs. Honesty is important, but brace yourself.

[Davidgeo]

Fair enough. But you didn't critique the poem, just poetry in general. That exposes you're true intentions... and I just lost respect for you over that. You don't have to like what I write, but if you're gonna throw shade you need to do it specifically not just generically. I'm pretty sure you didn't read a word of that poem. You came here with a review in mind. Again... I just lost respect for you.