Present Gift

the future is scheduled

the past has been cancelled

the present's a dream

it's why we call it a gift

coming apart at the seams

as we cease to exist

Reviews

[Robert Trakofler]

The art of cancelling the past is a great feat if it can be achieved not sure why anyone would want to completely for it is the stuff of our comprise. Loads of people try to schedule the future but no itinerary can sway the flow of tide. However the present of presence is an ever unraveling weave indeed... the threads of which reach far back beyond anyone's reach and the pattern of the makings of existence is an ever changing interpretation of the viewers eye. Not sure of the negative reaction of the previous review because this short poem is very thought provoking regardless of the eyes view and i do enjoy the image of the coming apart at the seems.....

[Davidgeo]

That's a pretty insightful review, more so than the poem itself probably. Thanks Bunny. In regards to the d********g review, it's a long and stupid story... and you're better off ignoring it completely. That guy is a f*****g moronic, bigoted, hypocritical, sexist, racist, dumb a*s... you're better off pretending him and his rage don't exist here.

[Robert Trakofler]

no i disagree that poem is what made me think that stream i rate it very high

[Gerald Parker]

"Not sure of the negative reaction of the previous review" - my words were NOT a negative review!

[Davidgeo]

Relax Gerald... he wasn't talking about your review. Everyone of us would be better off not to elaborate on that bullshit any further. It's not productive any way you slice it.

[Robert Trakofler]

referring to John Alexander McFadyen review yours came afterwards:)

[Robert Trakofler]

at least on my screen? meant no offense Mr. Parker

[Gerald Parker]

OK, I'm relaxing. No problem.

[4000Years]

Very interesting. By saying, "the future is scheduled," you remind me of a Twilight Zone episode, "A Matter of Minutes." In this episode, each minute of life is a separate world individually constructed by a group of faceless workmen for us to experience before passing on to the next minute. There are occasional mistakes made in the construction of a minute, like forgetting to put a key in the right place, and then replacing it in the upcoming minute, but nothing too serious. Your poem is reminiscent of this, thought provoking and a reminder that time is a continuum. We should remember this and take each moment as a treasure, not for granted.

Thank you for the opportunity to experience the little gem of yours. I appreciate it greatly.

4K

[Davidgeo]

Thanks 4K. Being compared to that episode is high praise. If you're interested and not already aware of it the inspiration for that episode was a short story by a guy named Ted Sturgeon called "Yesterday Was Monday".

[Wyrn Tiger]

The more I read the more I like. I like them so much I wanna marry them. Wait that's weird, but you get the point.

[Joicy Christopher]

The present is a "dream". and I'm "consciously" reading ur work. Good one, enjoyed reading.

[Davidgeo]

Ha... clever review. Well done.

[Joicy Christopher]

😊 haa. Really...

[Davidgeo]

Yes. Really.

[Dreamer]

"Coming apart at the seams"
It's a little confusing part, since the present is a "gift" do you perhaps mean the present is being unraveled? It's beautiful and sweet in it's message, great job!

[Davidgeo]

The present is impossible to hold onto beyond subjective memory, which isn't real in any kind of objective physical sense anyway so it would be a mistake to consider it to be significantly related in any concrete sense of the word. The present is constantly passing us by, constantly "falling apart" in the wake of time's progression and the ability for the living to "experience" that and even contemplate it is the greatest gift the universe has bestowed upon us.... in my opinion anyway. Thanks for your review, that was an excellent question on your part.

[Alexa Nichols]

Interesting poem. I really like it! Send me a private message when you get time!

[AYVID N]

If the present is near perfect, it does seem like a dream in retrospect. Thats why it should be felt rather than dwelt upon. Because everything good must end. I know that somewhere at the back of my mind.

[Davidgeo]

It's true, all things end... even the good ones. Everything dies eventually. Us humans, the sun, the solar system even the universe (as we currently understand it) is finite. But if nothing ended we'd never be able to appreciate anything, we'd take everything for granted... because it would be. Thanks for stopping by Divya, it's always nice to hear from you.

[John the Baptist]

I don't know if the poet intended it that way, but the poem resembles a Buddhist outlook. The future is scheduled, in that our physical bodies will die, and the past is no more. Only the present moment exists, and we should regard it as a gift by devoting our attention to it. Of course, part of the human mind is always wandering, sometimes to the future, sometimes to the past. That is our challenge, to be what we are now as fully as possible.

[Davidgeo]

Not exactly... but close enough.

[Shep]

love the words they inspire me as they move me with emotion. for the ring of truth in them. good job in pointing it out.

[Davidgeo]

To inspire anybody for any reason means a lot to me. It truly means a lot to me for you to say that.

[Shep]

your welcome

[Papaya]

to be able to cancel the past is as much a gift as the present and despite life being considered a gift and all that, the present often falls apart at the seams because of the past, and because history repeats itself the future is not only scheduled but predictable. on a positive note... neat poem

[Davidgeo]

If time was a thing instead of a process... what would you make it look like?

[Papaya]

A clock .

[Davidgeo]

Perfect.. .

[Dave]

The future may be scheduled but we don't know what it holds. We may look forward to it , but only with some degree of trepidation. The here and now, today's present, is what we must deal with. To make the best of it so when it becomes the past it is something we can fondly remember.

Take care - Dave

[Davidgeo]

"to make the best of it so when it becomes the past..." Well put Dave. I'm proud to share names with you.

[Dave]

Me too - Dave

Take care - Dave