Less Than Zero

you're a loser 
your confidence is fake
your success is all luck

you smile out of fear

you frown for no reason

you act like a schmuck
in public. . .

you drink too much beer

you assume without thought

you're barely awake
enough. . .
you hide all your faults
one brick at a time

one wall at a time

one flaw at a time

all your memorable moments 

you hide from your pain
you run from your love
you hide inside the insane
inside the mundane
away from what's real
because. . .
you're a loser
because. . .

you have nothing real to offer

to anyone or anything

or at least,

that's what you tell yourself

that it couldn't be clearer 

everyday in the mirror

you can only see nothing

and that terrifies you 

infinitely 

Author's Note

Reviews

[LazerRays]

Well, it was like this was literally like a poem about me... You have an ability to make the words SPEAK to people, you know that? I felt myself noddin in shame along each line. I like the part where you mention hiding all of your faults brick by brick. It makes me think of Pink Floyd's song, brick in the wall? That's the name? Yeah. I think so. It has that sort of tone.
Anyways, I did enjoy the raw truth and that killer of an end
"everyday in the mirror
you can only see nothing"
great job, Dave!

[Davidgeo]

Thanks sarah. This one was kind of a downer. More so than usual.

[LazerRays]

Sometimes the 'downer' poems are the ones we need to hear...

[Davidgeo]

That is very true.

[John the Baptist]

Loved the staccato brevity of it. Probably not a good idea to include it in a resume, though.

[Davidgeo]

Thanks. And I agree... this is probably not something to put your linkedin profile.