Space Treaties

out there we are human
down here we are different
out there we are teammates

in common with another

but down here, we are bickering

b*****s full of hatreds

and out there, we look forward

all together with a purpose 

with a hope

  for the best things

 for an entire f*****g species

and down here we are....

       disordered

hoping for whatever

to go further

at another's expense

in the same place

at great cost

with less reason

      at great cost

to the human

to our species 

    down here,

  with each other. . . 

(we are more alone:(

together 

Author's Note

Reviews

[AYVID N]

I've rarely witnessed real team spirit in the professional groups around me except under very extenuating circumstances, threats and deadlines when some kind of a bond must be forged and even then the cohesiveness evaporates once the task is accomplished and the groups disband. What I mostly see is window dressing and the cutting undercurrents beneath the surface. Mainly the reason, we don't really go further.

[Alexa Nichols]

Loved it. I could feel the rhythm of your words. Nicely done.

[Davidgeo]

Why thank you. I think the video I attached at the end is the best part. (which I did not come up with)

[LKBillips]

Oh that's a cool perspective. Never thought of it like that before. I like your pic of Neil deGrasse Tyson too! His show is awesome.

[Ethan]

This is great, is this contrasting the views people interested in space exploration have when they speak about space with the way they speak about earthly problems?

[H.L. Cerveise]

Loved this poem. It shows our good potential as we expand our horizon (both physically and cosmically) beyond this life giving planet we find ourselves on. It tells how often we distort and hurt others to work and survive. There are groups who do work well here on Earth, find them and join in.

Well done!

[Gaurav]

The cosmos has established for people down here...but it has become so micro that we have lost sense of our huge nature...down here everything is disordered..

[Davidgeo]

The cosmos doesn't care about people, we are far less than a blink of an eye or fart in the wind compared to the rest of it. Most of everything out there is completely hostile to life, the cosmos doesn't establish anything for anyone... it just does what it does. And down here, everything is far more ordered (lower entropy). It is a closed system where we actively harvest, manage and utilize various forms of energy in all kinds of different ways. Life itself in general is proof of that. Sorry, but your review is not tethered to reality.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

great last two lines...and this theme is such truth...out there we are together, but where it counts we have little or no contact...no love, no real touch with each other...just that bitterness, envy and hatred. And if we move life to another planet to start over...we will do the same.
very well said.
j.

[Chris Shaw]

In the business world it can be dog eat dog. I have seen it so often. However I have seen great examples of team spirit and people working together for the good of humanity. We are at our best when disaster strikes, but unfortunately in day to day living, we are our own worse enemy.

Chris

[Shubham Sharma]

Some say you can gauge the sanity of a poet by his poetry.

[Davidgeo]

Hmm.... Okay.

[KWP]

I often wonder how close tp the point of no return we all must go as a race before we truly band together.

I believe in the most part that people are good,kind and full of love. That kinda stuff is inherent - it the groups that kill the spirit, it's the groups that kinda brainwash and the problem with most of the population is, they want to be part of groups.

I do feel a shift coming though, the wide eyed and aware younger generation is where my hopes lie - they can see the mistakes of the past right up close - they are our best hope yet.

[Davidgeo]

Maybe it's because I live in America but the shift I see over here is largely based on vanity when it comes to the millennial generation. Social media is normalizing a very superficial and disingenuous way of presenting the self. But that just might be a very visible minority I am seeing. Also... I'm kind of a pessimist by nature and we tend to see what we wanna see. I'd be pretty happy with being wrong about millennials though.

[KWP]

most of the millennial will probably present as you say - that's just the nature of things - I'd say its the same in a different way in my / our generations.It only takes a small few to make the changes we need , society would not cope if we were all game changers. I'm counting on that small few ... and If you didn't already know ... I am an optimist by nature - go figure we are yin and yang :)