Save For Circumstance

if you treat me like you
and i treat you like me
you and i might just find
all our separations to be illusions
our differences to be just confusions
between a few temporal meat suits

stuck in time and neurotic 

in the dark behind boundaries

 

and save for circumstance,

save for circumstance. . . 

you would be me

and i would be you

Author's Note

Reviews

[drew garner]

I am scared to review your writing because you are so caustic and honest, but I find that is also what I love about your writing. so that was the review I guess lol.
also, I like this one quite a lot and am drunk enough to suggest changing the title to logistics are a b***h.
Only because I think it would add depth to the later repetition of save for circumstance.

[KWP]

I like the way you are honest enough to say you are scared :D ... dunno why though ... Dave is such a big teddy bear really

[KWP]

but did you actually have the nerve to suggest a new title ?????!!! now that's funny !!! :D

[drew garner]

He is a good poet.

[drew garner]

also...yes lol

[drew garner]

But it was just that, a suggestion. He reviewed my writing ounce and kind of ripped me a deserved new one. and it inspired me to be better, right or wrong it was just a suggestion. I don't do the circle-jerk style of review anymore I only review things I enjoy or offer constructive criticism, which is all I ask for from any other writer on here. In relation ship to this poem I enjoyed it gave it a perfect score, and offered an alternative title.

[KWP]

you still thinking about it ... ? let it go :D

DAVE IS A TEDDY BEAR :D

[KWP]

sorry Dave - secret is out man !!!

[Gee]

A smart, witty, generous teddy bear :))

[drew garner]

I am so screwed....

[KWP]

hahahahahahahahaha love it ... :D

[Davidgeo]

Never be scared to speak your mind. Especially here... It's just the internet, so say whatever you like however you'd like to say it. No actual harm can really come to you. A******s who say dickish things online have exactly as much power as you allow them to have. You get to chose how you other's affect you. Which, I know, is a lot easier than it sounds... none the less - it does remain true.

Your title suggestion kinda sucks though, so I'll be sticking with the current one.

And god damn it, I am a f*****g teddy bear. Ever since I slaughtered Teddy Ruxpin and his family in their sleep I've been the acting mother f****n' president of all teddy bears.

(bears are truly vicious violent creatures... and Ruxpin might've been a sex offender to boot)

[Davidgeo]

I meant... "a lot harder than it sounds".

I do a lot of drugs on the weekends.

[KWP]

Teddy Bear - give me a hug :D :D

[Davidgeo]

It would be my pleasure.

(ignore the erection)

[KWP]

hahahahahahaha *no filter ;)

[drew garner]

ok, also fair point.

[Davidgeo]

I'd like to see you write something very intimidating.

[drew garner]

it's more you not the work that is intimidating. I enjoy your work, your just a very unpredictable human being.

[Davidgeo]

Look a bit closer. I'm really not as inconsistent as you'd think.

When I asked you to write something intimidating I was thinking more in terms of increasing your self confidence as a writer... as a way to find your voice with confidence. That approach works very well for some.

You're right, none of my work is meant to be intimidating. That's not what we are talking about though.

Something tells me you're unselfish to the point of fallacy.

[drew garner]

it's possible, also I am sorry I misunderstood you. I am not very good at socializing and I definitely have my faults. I just spend most of my time working on my creative output. But you have definitely given me something to think about.

[Davidgeo]

Don't apologize for things like that.

Apologies and creativity do not compliment each other.

[KWP]

oh you two :D

you never asked me to write something intimidating - what a great exercise ...

PS Unpredictable is good - like really good - I'd hate to be predictable in life ...

[drew garner]

I took you advice and tried to write something intimidating. the new poem called a weekend of madness, just curious of what you think of it.

[Davidgeo]

I'll check it out in a bit and let you know.

[Ethan]

I like this poem so much, meat suits is fire.

[wredit.jordan]

I love the first stanza! I really liked how you rhymed illusions to confusions; it really added to the flow of your poem.

[Davidgeo]

Thanks. I'm happy you enjoyed this one.

[Me Llamo Itzel Moctezum..]

Deep and filled with so much meaning. I love this.

[Davidgeo]

That's high praise. Thanks doll face.

[Dinesh Kumar]

so true
i liked the last two lines a lot
(you would be me
and i would be you)

they gives the jist of your writing

[Chris Shaw]

What an interesting concept. Your writes always give my grey matter a work out David.

Chris

[Davidgeo]

That's all writing as we do here really is... mental gymnastics. I'm glad I can give you a work out.

[Gaurav]

Yes as sages have said seeing self in every thing and then becoming one with everything. Nice write up :)

[Gee]

Now wouldn't that be just the thing. Dave, the carpentry contracts manager, putting up with whining, take, take, take, men behaving like babies. Bet ya couldn't bite your tongue as much as I have to !!!
( at present, because of the glut of work, we as contractors are beholding to the subbies ....we use all self employed labour)
Hope you are well

[Davidgeo]

People who bite their tongue do tend to do better professionally. But that's very boring and fake to me; being like that for 40+ hours a week would drive me insane. I'm lucky enough for that not to matter too much though, I get paid no matter my disposition.

Your review is kinda, strange, in consideration to what it was you were reviewing.

[KWP]

so, when I read the first two lines I immediately thought of Osho - love me some Osho - he is articulate like you. I mean really though, the only separations are illusions as you say - we are all one, we are all connected, to some this is easy to grasp. others not so much. This oneness, this everywhen is the god of all things - we are the god of all things we, without meaning to put a label on it, are indeed god - but just that word is enough to stifle ... so yeah man -

I am he as you are he as you are me
And we are all together
See how they run like pigs from a gun
See how they fly
I'm crying

and yes circumstance has something to do with it - but oh there is so much more :D

[Davidgeo]

Every variable is a circumstance. Even the tiniest most insignificant thing affects vastly different outcomes... that whole "a butterfly flaps its wings in Peking and you get thunderstorms in Chicago" thing... I am applying that to individuals. If all things were equal down to the infinitesimal - and all genetics were identical, all environments the same -- we'd all be the same exact people. Our differences are not our own as living things, our differences are only that of our circumstance.

[Julie McCarthy (juliesp..]

I like this a lot there is some truth in this a very good poem indeed thankyou

[Davidgeo]

It may be true, it may not be. Just remember, anyone who says they are sure either way is a liar.read moreIt may be true, it may not be. Just remember, anyone who says they are sure either way is a liar.