There is 4 of Them

and one of them you cannot touch

you cannot meet me 

at a place without a time

or really be anyone at all

in a time without a place

of the four of them

they are all my favorite

of the four of them 

the up and down of them

of what we live embedded in

to the left and the right of us

from the four of them

out from the in behind's of me

upon me then from 

the straight ahead's of me

there is always something

i just cannot grasp

something 

almost constantly in passing

something

i always see it

something

just behind of me 

and then right there 

just in front of me

but never quite, right here

 

mostly like a memory

i still always feel it

but never just, right now

sorta like a prediction 

that can never happen

something always never

quite really anything

anywhere at all ever

(right now)

like the whisper

of a dream

quietly passing

in an instant

through the dead of night

(right here)

Author's Note

Reviews

[Poetic License]

I greatly enjoyed this piece. It put me in mind of an Celtic knot, never beginning, never ending, but always managing to start where ever your eyes happens to land and completing just behind. What a wonderful topsy-turvy ride through the, "almost got it.... nope, don't go it" realm of the mind. Expectional!

[Davidgeo]

The "almost got it... nope, don't got it" realm was what I was going for. Thanks for the review.

[Jolan H]

Wow now that moves. This poem a is head Turner. I loved it start to finish my brain was engaged

[WillaDanvers]

I like the idea behind this poem, and you have some great imagery. But, there is always a but ahah, I found that the intermittent lines really threw me for a loop and I wasn't able to grasp the entire intention of the poem unfortunately. Despite this, I did like your content and imagery. Well done :)

[Davidgeo]

Thanks for your honest review.

I think you might be on to something when you mentioned the intermittent lines. I'm far too lazy to fix this one but I'll be keeping that in mind for the future. Thanks again camera face.

[Richard McLin]

This whole thing was a great example of how to do a mystery poem.
great job.

-Richard

[Davidgeo]

How do you mean?

[Richard McLin]

There seems to be a lot of things said, but not really answered.

A lot of hidden things that are almost revealed, but are really just hinted at.

It's a fantastic piece, one that I've read multiple times, and have gotten something different out of every time.

[Davidgeo]

That's about right. It was about perception, our place in it and it's limits. I see perception as both well known and not even close to fully understood. Blending philosophy and physics is almost always a good time.

[guy drori]

The ending was strong - "Through the dead of night." Gave it a mysterious sensation. Nice write :)

[Davidgeo]

Thanks man. You look like you work for one of the top three drug cartels in Mexico.

[guy drori]

Lol well thanks, i'll take that as a compliment I think