Deterrance is Overrated

Deterrance is Overrated

A Poem by Davidgeo
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in the extremely thorough punishments
like beating down a psychotic today
is no improvement to our society tomorrow
as the very thorough punishment today
and the making of a better world tomorrow
are not even a little bit compatible
but the vengeance, oh the vengeance 
how sweet she tastes
oh so delicious
and righteous 
is that thought of retribution
far before forgiveness
it is intoxicating 
to the core
it is justice 
spread eagle
on the floor
like being very drunk and quite stoned 
it always and eventually. . .
inevitably 
       it always does,     it comes down
and turns into a cancer that festers
one masked as pure moral pleasure
         one eye for an eye
one tooth for a tooth
25 to life for sellin' some dope
in our model of retribution
all things lead to nothing
but another circle of destruction
another generation of broken lives
            and spitefulness 

© 2018 Davidgeo


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When I first read your title and before I read the text, I thought nuclear missiles and I believe having them works when you are dealing with rogue states. But your poem is not about that. It is about I think retribution for criminal acts or maybe not even criminal acts.. And sometimes I think the punishments are totally out of kilt. For instance, I read about a woman in the USA who has recently been pardoned after serving 20 years in prison for a drugs offence. That to me was like taking a sledge hammer to crack a nut. You see and hear about cases like that all the time, but also in the reverse too. Justice needs to work, it needs to be fair and seen to be fair. Also my bug is concerning prisoners who have served their sentence and then try and build a life for themselves afterwards. How difficult that can be. Everything is weighted against them. They can't do this, they can't do that, finding employment can become a problem and then they end up by committing a further crime just to exist. Full circle. When they have served their sentence, they don't need another one when they are released. We live in a world short on forgiveness and tough on retribution. That's where your words took me David. And that doesn't just apply to criminals, it applies to everything.

Chris

Posted 6 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.




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It's hard to watch and see people forced to rot in n a prison for such minor things. And even when you're not guilty, if you're accused, people still want to watch you burn. Our sense of justice is flawed. Justice is supposed to be blind and non-emotional, but it seems, as of late, everyone throws their emotions into it. Anger, hate, and fear all being thrown at anyone who does anything even slightly wrong. It's hard to live in this world where judgement and morals are so vast from person to person.

Posted 6 Years Ago


and turns into a cancer that festers
one masked as pure moral pleasure
one eye for an eye
one tooth for a tooth
25 to life for sellin' some dope

Loved this line, something about it just hits me. Great writing, and another wonderful piece. Great job.
-Richard

Posted 6 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Davidgeo

6 Years Ago

I wish our country wasn't so in love with the punishment part of criminal sentencing. For some crim.. read more
Really like this one. "but the vengeance, oh the vengeance
how sweet she tastes" sometimes blinding us from our own humanity. Selfish reasons and bitter hearts. And the system never equal in the weight and severity of it's punishments to crimes. Interesting read indeed.

Posted 6 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Davidgeo

6 Years Ago

Thanks for takin' a look see. I'm glad it was interesting to you. I think victimless crimes like c.. read more
I am not sure if the world would be a safer and better place with no deterrents in place. I feel at present, we dont have an alternative. We simply don't have such a vast, varied system of rehabilitation and like (what would we do with heinous murderers, child rapists, keep them, counsel them, cosset them?) Murderers would go on murdering with impunity, without fear and that's just human nature. So till violence is genetically engineered out of the human race, I wish, like the US, my country gave out more capital punishment and cut the terribly long judicial process needed to do it. There has to be closure for the victims or their families and the feeling that the system cares. In the end, that's the only positive thing that comes out of it.

A softer approach may work for minor offenders and lesser crimes though.

Posted 6 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Davidgeo

6 Years Ago

I'm not talking about extreme capital crimes like murder or child molestation or even certain types .. read more
When I first read your title and before I read the text, I thought nuclear missiles and I believe having them works when you are dealing with rogue states. But your poem is not about that. It is about I think retribution for criminal acts or maybe not even criminal acts.. And sometimes I think the punishments are totally out of kilt. For instance, I read about a woman in the USA who has recently been pardoned after serving 20 years in prison for a drugs offence. That to me was like taking a sledge hammer to crack a nut. You see and hear about cases like that all the time, but also in the reverse too. Justice needs to work, it needs to be fair and seen to be fair. Also my bug is concerning prisoners who have served their sentence and then try and build a life for themselves afterwards. How difficult that can be. Everything is weighted against them. They can't do this, they can't do that, finding employment can become a problem and then they end up by committing a further crime just to exist. Full circle. When they have served their sentence, they don't need another one when they are released. We live in a world short on forgiveness and tough on retribution. That's where your words took me David. And that doesn't just apply to criminals, it applies to everything.

Chris

Posted 6 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.


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