Evo

one or two more's
in a pattern

breath here and now
deep for a living

so goes all these seconds

 - so goes breathing

    - so goes us repeating

coy and clever

we have our moments

yet we are monsters

and so it goes

and so we follow

and yes we will

kill things to live

               for our living

so goes living

               for a living 

we end beings

as we do live to take

and make it us

as we do live to stay

                

to un-begin beginnings

                

to keep our living 

           we play for blood

to survive

           as something living

we play for keeps

           we play for blood

as peace unrhymed

(can you make that beautiful?)

       we call it... evolution 

we call it... propagation 

what needs no rhyme

(when you make it lovely)

      what just stays alive

(when you make it gorgeous)

      until it dies 

one day

one day

       that day

when we lose it all
       and die for keeps

on that day

       is our unbecoming

      (so i'll see you there)

                                 in that end

on that day. . .

we'll meet right there

      (exactly there)

       in the very end

I will see you there

you will see us there

Author's Note

Reviews

[AYVID N]

I like it when you say we are monsters. Not a better word I could think of. Most of the time Its all about us and making it all about us. Most of the time, we live, denying its all about us. Till evolution steps in and puts us out our misery. I hope I am a even little on point. Because much about the theory of evolution is still unproven.

I'd love to meet you there though, I wonder what it'll be like :)

[Davidgeo]

I fixed it so it sounds better. Like, very significant changes. I didn't expect anyone to actually read this on Friday.

None the less, I still think evolution as a concept is not really very debatable. The preponderance of the evidence is just to hard to ignore.

[AYVID N]

The "for keeps" thing really gets to me . We play for the impossible. So deluded. Your words are sobering.

Strange, how its already Saturday here.

[Davidgeo]

We all get to die. It better be a good time after... otherwise, we all will end up have wasted a whole bunch of time and s***s.

It's always the next day somewhere though.
Happy Saturday!

[AYVID N]

I agree. thanks.

[KWP]

we are not all monsters we are just existing in this funny strange kind of reality we call home - what’s the norm to a hunter in the harsh Siberian winter having to kill any child second born our of sheer necessity is not the norm to those in the west where we live and bath in ‘a plenty’.

For the Indians who cannot fathom eating beef because are holy is very different to the stockman who spend their days tending to the cows for the very reason of selling to a society told red meat will make you strong and different again to the Jains who don’t believe a single living thing should be killed.

I don’t like people agreeing we are all monsters - we are not - some of us are aware enough to relaise this is just time and place and make adjustments accordingly to run in line with our own values. Some of us can ‘see things as they really are’ and realise none of it really matters it is just your own interpretation of it. Some of us are not monsters because instead we are sheep, we need a shepard for guidance and we are too scared to disagree in fear of disapproval - but that’s ok because if all the world were monsters, or if all the world were sheep, or if everyone had the same awareness, I’m sure this reality would have imploded a long time ago ... really, it’s all about the balance ...

[Davidgeo]

I'm a monster.

[Davidgeo]

I eat shepherds.

[AYVID N]

Hi :)

While I like and respect your voice I do have my own set of notions, however flawed they may seem to some but they are purely my own, as I see something. I am not easily led nor do I agree with anyone just for the sake of agreeing with them. I do not fear anyone and won't be found anywhere unless I really and truly want to be there. (I hate confrontations though and usually try to side step them)

I usually do not believe in explaining my comments, monsters to me here meant my own primal self that which naturally, in the dark, thinks of its needs first and foremost and I doubt there is anyone that by default don't think of themselves first. (I'd like to meet them) I agree its all relative though and the positive and negative forces seem to me to be brought to balance by the cyclic forces of Karma and Nature.

Thank you for commenting on my comment. I am very impressed and humbled by your intricate knowledge of my culture and your obvious love and regard for my country. I am a Hindu Christian presently posted in Central India and I'd like to be friends with you ⚘

[KWP]

Great response :) You are right you don’t need to explain yourself to me or anyone else - I like it.

Where are you in India?

[AYVID N]

I am around the city of Bhopal, that's the capital of the Central most state, Madhya Pradesh. I am posted here as I work in a Government owned oil company. I am based in Hyderabad though. I gather you're from Australia.

[KWP]

I was reading about Bhopal recently - why was that? I can’t remember - what is there that is significant? It was a strange reason I was following my nose to your city - I simply cannot remember.

Oh yes, I am an Aussie.

[AYVID N]

Bhopal was the centre of a horrific human tragedy in 1984 - the Union Carbide gas leak that killed and maimed millions. It has come a long way since then though with all the foreign aid after that. Its a lovely, green city now.

Nice to know you.

[Davidgeo]

Aww... now you guys are friends... how adorable.... my poems don't usually even indirectly induce friendships. This makes me happy.

[KWP]

we were never not friends ! just like someone else I know I speak my mind - actually the words just pummel down my chin like a landslide - must put some thought into that ....

[Davidgeo]

I didn't mean to say you were enemies really, just that you had a productive conversation which almost always enhances a relationship of any sort.

[AYVID N]

I am glad you spoke your mind, KWP. It must have cleared the notions of many about the equation I share with this poet. The bonus, is we get to be friends. I like that you speak the way you do. I wouldn't change.

[KWP]

I have no idea what you share with this poet - neither do I care :D I have though been thinking about that terrible accident in Bhopal ... I have also been thinking about Ladakh ... like a lot, I have been thinking about my friend from Punjab who just found out his father has maybe two months left to live and he has to travel home to his family ... I have been thinking about my fave person on this site, who is very similar to myself in many ways ... and then not at all ... and now I am thinking about what utter drivel I am posting on this page ... ha! sorry guys X

[AYVID N]

Sorry about your friend. I hope all ends well x

[KWP]

it won’t end well - but this is the nature of life ... X