Writers Cafe

who do i write for?
an emmajoy
maybe an ana sophia
a mrs jewel or mr jacob
something like,
    "whatever's clever"
a faux a*s relic,
a plagiaristic rhyme

called mr Wordman...
a pandering gimmick

like the chicks who like my violence
"let me tell you how it is" (for the views)
a thing that dies (like a commercial)
words that rhyme...

   can you say?
faux popularity
on the surface, so sublime

like a gimmick

  like a play

    (ugh, we make us sick)

as we do the same thing...

   I just don't lie about it

 

Write your own way...

      Set your own pace

(that's your heaven) 

                                We all end up on the other side

anyway (eventually)

                 this is pandering (mon cher)

We're all fuggin' stupid

      (at least the jewel is super hot)

"air assault"

      (don't join the army)

Author's Note

Reviews

[Richard McLin]

Damn man, where was my mention!! Well it was a nice piece. Had a structure that you have honed very well, and a good flow, but it seemed somewhat forced, as if it didn't flow naturally. I liked it, but I think if it felt more organic, I would have loved it.
-Richard

[Davidgeo]

I think you might be on to something there. I had far too much to drink when I wrote that thing. It's already dead to me. Thanks for the suggestions anyway though, I do believe them to be apt.

[Nipplegrinder]

No mention of me. Therefore, this is s**t.

[Rebecca Leigh]

I really like this piece... it reminds me of Bukowski's poetry... he was honest and exactly himself... well done.

[Davidgeo]

That's high praise. As Nicolas Cage would say...

[Sarah Wilson]

I like this. Its very real and the emotions are clear. It touches on how we can fall into this cycle where we hate people for being fake, but turn around and do the same thing, so we end up hating ourselves and turn to putting too much stock in things like reviews to tell us that we're good at writing. I don't know if it's on purpose, but I think that the odd spacing helps to add to the way this piece is put together.

[Davidgeo]

Thanks for being generous with your review.

I'm sure I had a reason for the spacing at the time. That's a device I abuse quite often.

[Riley]

Even though you were drunk while writing this, it does seem to have a good flow, then proceeds into choppy territory. It really is not a bad piece at all, but it could use a little bit of adjustments.

[Davidgeo]

I appreciate the positivity of your review. And I believe you about the adjustments, but, I don't really want to get back into this particular piece.

[Glen's not so clean sla..]

This here is gospel my friend. Preach it!

[Davidgeo]

You picture is hilarious... I audibly laugh every time I see it.

[Glen's not so clean slate]

Glad to make ye laugh my friend, and yes, I have been working out of late...

[Davidgeo]

Clearly...

[Anjali]

Nice... I liked it.... Liked the concept and the theme of this piece.

[Davidgeo]

Thanks Anjali. I wasn't very sober when I wrote this.

[Anjali]

You're welcome!

[Cherrie Palmer]

I agree, I think a writer should write for themselves. It's nice to get confirmation from others who do the same. But the satisfaction comes from the creation and not how others receive it.

[Davidgeo]

I might of been a little too intoxicated when I wrote that one. I'm almost afraid to read it sober.

[Cherrie Palmer]

Lol keep it up and we are going to have an intervention.

[Davidgeo]

I love interventions... so much fun to get drunk with everyone after its over.

[Cherrie Palmer]

Well I'll bring the bourbon

[Dinesh Kumar]

Nicely penned
Beautiful.

[Davidgeo]

Thanks Dinesh. I'm glad you enjoyed. Welcome to the site... I look forward to reading you in the future.

[Dinesh Kumar]

Mention not

[Gee]

You obviously don't write for me as I visit most times and leave none the wiser and most times scratching my head. Writing for me would have to be in a bath book with a simple rhyme, the kinda thing tots have before they move on to Janet and John.
We should all write for ourselves, however it seems many pander to what they think others might like and so wee groups of ( not ) like minded writers are formed.
A few of the people you mention I enjoy reading and having a matter with, guess it would be a boring old world if we were all the same.
Anyway, you won't get many reviews for fear of the reviewees (made up word methinks ) upsetting those you have mentioned.
Hope you are well and with Mr J Daniels to hand.

[Davidgeo]

Sure, I must be drunk and makin' things up... or maybe I've been here for a while.... perhaps seen some things. I'm a chameleon gee, you've talked to me and you never even knew it. The fun i have here is far beyond you.

[Davidgeo]

Your sense of humor is dogshit.

[Gee]

I know..........

[Davidgeo]

I'm totally cowshitting you.

[Gee]

You cowshit on

[Davidgeo]

Please call me a f*****g a*****e please. It'll bring balance back to the universe. Probably.
read morePlease call me a f*****g a*****e please. It'll bring balance back to the universe. Probably.

[Gee]

Can't, don't know you. You're probably an extremely nice person if met face to face. No point swearing at a computer screen.

[Davidgeo]

And who the fug gave you a down vote? This has been amusing at the very least...

[Davidgeo]

I am a horrible person... especially in real life.

[Gee]

Bollocks, perhaps you like to think you are. We've all got a soft side, even you.

[Davidgeo]

One can to be enough to ruin the other. I love your optimism none the less.

[Gee]

Always gotta try and look on the bright side. Not here long enough to spend to much time and energy being angry and miserable.
Hope you enjoy the rest of your night. I'll leave you in peace before you tell me to f**k off. Take care