Montauk

. it won't make sense to you, it reads fine though I think .

the possibility of attractions
among dragons
pretending to be humans
is an insane thing. . .
like sharks eating sharks
for no reasons
  besides anxiety reactions
humanly misplaced

    sans the bloody waters
    floating the finest perverse entertainments. . .

pitting things against things

   that should've never been things. . .

(oh what darlings we are!)

oh the possibility of attractions!

     (may we never make sense)

meet me in Montauk

all dressed up  and. .   .   all alone

absurd and, all worn out

bleeding colors

like a drowning polaroid

in the clearest of waters 

Reviews

[Author Gus]

Probably just because you're a soldier; but I interpret it to be about war. Dragons and sharks being soldiers. Fighting because one side has something that the other side's government wants (attractions) even though the individuals themselves don't actually give a rip about those attractions. 'Things that should never have been things' probably referring to acts of terrorism. Then the ending would be a soldier seeing through the recruitment promises and just wanting peace, seeing clearly for the first time.

In all likelihood I'm dead wrong but I guess that's the beauty of abstract writing, just like the art, it means something different to everybody.

[Davidgeo]

You are not exactly wrong. But you misidentified things. Which was obviously my intention.

What I mean this to be specifically is irrelevant. You get the gist so get jiggy with it. Take what you can, use it as you can. ( I've never had the opportunity to say "get jiggy with it")

[Davidgeo]

(do not put weight on this bullshit... trust how you interpret things... I'm obviously a drunken stupid idiot with a dictionary)

[Nipplegrinder]

I like this. A good read.

[April Blue]

I love the way the words come together, it's as if the words don't belong but somehow you made them come together very nicely.. I also like the visual picture I am getting form the emotion in the words.

[Davidgeo]

Thank you very much April.

[Cherrie Palmer]

Some people have a mask with in a mask. They cannot even be honest with themselves. However a dragon can spot a dragon no matter how many masks they wear.
This piece is strong and creative and the closing line profound.

[Davidgeo]

Thanks Cherrie. I really enjoyed (in a strange way) writing this.

[Richard McLin]

Very vivid and descriptive. I loved the part about dragons pretending to be humans, and the end about drowning Polaroid. Your flow and word usage is impeccable. Great job.
-Richard

[Davidgeo]

You've been here for quite some time. You've read and written many things.... was that really so vivid or are you just kinda, maybe... sayin' that for effect? I kinda prefer when people are coarse and mean with an intellectual bite and maybe a little vengeance. Otherwise I might as well be talking to my cat while cook pancakes. (i did not edit this... forgive the errors sir)

[Richard McLin]

Well that is actually what I got from the piece. I can try to be more vengeful in future reviews so I’m higher up on the review chain than your cat.

[Davidgeo]

I'm just bustin' balls. It's just so boring being nice all the time I gotta switch it up sometimes. Yes, I know... I'm kind of a troll.

[Richard McLin]

Lol, it's all good. Good to shake things up a bit sometimes.