Arrogance and ignorance are stand out traits amongst upper management in the construction industry. Seems the less you know the higher you get, promoting to keep them out of the way is the only logical explanation for their high wages and lofty positions.
Pigeons and statues, us the statues. They fly in, briefly, s**t on us from a great height then f**k off again, thankfully.
Morning, hope all is well.
Posted 6 Years Ago
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6 Years Ago
I'll have to avoid that industry if I ever find myself looking for work in your neck of the woods.read moreI'll have to avoid that industry if I ever find myself looking for work in your neck of the woods.
I got really lost on this... could you explain this for me?
Posted 6 Years Ago
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6 Years Ago
How you deal with things is what makes you... it really is that simple. I kept it pretty vague so .. read moreHow you deal with things is what makes you... it really is that simple. I kept it pretty vague so the reader could insert their own obstacles. For example... intelligence vs wisdom... an intelligent person is academically sound, a wise person is both academically sound and moral. For comparison's sake consider a lawyer vs a philosopher or a trauma surgeon vs a plastic surgeon, the motivations are different and have different value or stigma attached to them. Now, dependent on what you value the better end of that comparison can be different. The rest of the poem are just different versions of that theme.
6 Years Ago
hmmm thats interesting... maybe you could add some more detail so the reader can sense and feel it. .. read morehmmm thats interesting... maybe you could add some more detail so the reader can sense and feel it. I feel like this has potential to become a great piece of art.
6 Years Ago
That's not what kind of poem this is. Sometimes too much detail detracts from the poem. I'm not a .. read moreThat's not what kind of poem this is. Sometimes too much detail detracts from the poem. I'm not a "pretty beautiful flowers in a sensuous meadow" kind of writer. I rely on concepts firmly rooted in psychology/philosophy/sociology/philology mostly.
6 Years Ago
ok. I mean yeah everyone writes differently. I just haven't really seen anything like it.
Haha I didn't mean original... I meant it as a compliment!
6 Years Ago
I'm always bustin' balls C Lee.... never take me too seriously. That's a different kind of fun for .. read moreI'm always bustin' balls C Lee.... never take me too seriously. That's a different kind of fun for me that never ends well.
This was kind of cliche just to be honest. There's no art in this, there's no beauty, feelings, this isn't even poetry. For just throwing words together, I suppose it was alright, but anybody could have wrote this. I want to read something that only an individual could have wrote. I understand this review is harsh, and probably isn't what you wanted to see, but I hope it helps!
Posted 6 Years Ago
6 Years Ago
Light the blue touch paper......
6 Years Ago
What do you mean?
6 Years Ago
Methinks the reply to your critique will be well worth reading :)
6 Years Ago
The problem with your review isn't the harsh nature, it's the sophomoric and thinly veiled motivatio.. read moreThe problem with your review isn't the harsh nature, it's the sophomoric and thinly veiled motivations behind it. "There's no art in this"... what does that even mean? Talk about cliché... you sound like a hipster freshmen college student. As far as anybody being able to write this, yeah, you're probably write... I'm not a professional poet. Are you a professional poet? You're probably in the wrong place then, we're all amateurs here so you will probably only be disappointed in us lowly scrub poet wanna-be's.
I enjoy harsh reviews with substance. Your review did not have substance. (I can tell you're lashing out because I politely called one of your poems boring.)
6 Years Ago
Okay, you want to make this personal. That's cute. First of all, before you act like I'm childish, y.. read moreOkay, you want to make this personal. That's cute. First of all, before you act like I'm childish, you need to run yourself through a grammar check, buddy. Write, and right are different; if you're going to insult me, do it properly. Now, I know my word choice is a little common to say the least when I say there's no art in this 'poem', but that's because art is about more than just a message. All this poem was, in a nutshell, was throwing words together that sounded pretty. I know I throw words together that sound pretty, but it always comes out to mean something, or provoke some feelings. I just about fell asleep.
Yourself, as a self described amateur, doesn't have time to defend someone else's clumsy writing. You need to work on your own 'art' before you both put me to sleep. I could barely even read yours due to improper formatting. I think if I had to choose between you, or a slow kid fresh off the short bus to write my eulogy, I'm picking the slow kid.
The whole point of this website is for us as authors to come together to learn from helpful critiques as well as gain encouragement from others. I understand you found one of my pieces boring, not every body sips the same cup of tea. However, you need to think twice before trying to beef with somebody when you can't even speak English.
Look kid, if you keep letting yourself get this w.. read moreHa... you think typos are personal?
Look kid, if you keep letting yourself get this worked up over a random review from a stranger life is only going to get harder for you. How long did it take you to come up with that thesis on why I suck as a human being? Think about all the others things you could be doing with that energy.
Try harder to be less of a jack a*s.
6 Years Ago
Your reading comprehension is far below average. That translates to you keep losing to that slow kid.. read moreYour reading comprehension is far below average. That translates to you keep losing to that slow kid. I never said the typo was personal. However, you keep making personal digs at me. That's okay if this is how you act when confronted with negative feedback. It explains a lot. However, I don't know you, I don't know if you do suck as a human being. On the other hand, you do suck at taking negative feedback thus far, and writing. I understand what I've said, and how I've formatted it seems like it takes a lot of energy for you because of course it would take a lot of energy for you to sound like you have half a brain! For me though, it's just an every day thing.
Your parting advice is cute, but I'd have to find a better teacher.
6 Years Ago
Ah.. well, I guess I'll have to work on my reading comprehension then. Tomorrow's an ab day but I t.. read moreAh.. well, I guess I'll have to work on my reading comprehension then. Tomorrow's an ab day but I think I can squeeze in some reading comprehension training as well. Thanks for the heads up champ.
i worked for a couple bosses who were like this, but have known many other people...control freaks and users...both we can do without...but the combination? ugh.
Self confidence and pride is what it's called when arrogance is a good thing. The word arrogance by .. read moreSelf confidence and pride is what it's called when arrogance is a good thing. The word arrogance by definition is an offensive display of self importance. Arrogance is a bad thing... every time. Self confidence is a good thing... every time.
6 Years Ago
Is there a thin line between them? I think sometimes one should let others decide whether one is arr.. read moreIs there a thin line between them? I think sometimes one should let others decide whether one is arrogant or just self-confident. I'm often told I'm being arrogant by my mother when I just try to put my point across. That too quite patiently :)
6 Years Ago
Sure, they share a lot of similarities. Viewing someone as arrogant or self confident usually has m.. read moreSure, they share a lot of similarities. Viewing someone as arrogant or self confident usually has more to do with the expectations of the person making the statement and various preconceived notions. It is always up to others to make the distinction... but the fact remains... arrogance is, objectively speaking, a word with negative connotations by definition. Arrogance is a bad thing, self confidence is a good thing.
Arrogance and ignorance are stand out traits amongst upper management in the construction industry. Seems the less you know the higher you get, promoting to keep them out of the way is the only logical explanation for their high wages and lofty positions.
Pigeons and statues, us the statues. They fly in, briefly, s**t on us from a great height then f**k off again, thankfully.
Morning, hope all is well.
Posted 6 Years Ago
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
6 Years Ago
I'll have to avoid that industry if I ever find myself looking for work in your neck of the woods.read moreI'll have to avoid that industry if I ever find myself looking for work in your neck of the woods.
Good! I loved the concept and theme of this poem... Quite unique. Very nice!
Posted 6 Years Ago
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6 Years Ago
Nothing we write is truly unique. Everything I write is just a paraphrasing of a larger reading rem.. read moreNothing we write is truly unique. Everything I write is just a paraphrasing of a larger reading remembered over my own lens of time.
Ha... I'm just f****n' with you. The real inspiration behind this was marijuana and youtube... no more, no less.
What we are or how we behave sometimes requires conditioning or what could be called 'experience'.
No one gets it right straight out of the gate. Nice poem. Nuggets of truth.
Posted 6 Years Ago
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6 Years Ago
Michael Jordan missed more game winning shots than he made. What made him great was that he hit tho.. read moreMichael Jordan missed more game winning shots than he made. What made him great was that he hit those shots when it mattered most;
intelligence vs wisdom i suppose.
No one ever does get it right straight out of the gate (not including inherited wealth). It makes me happy you understand my writing.