Occupation

i am not an idea
  however wrong today
i will exist here tomorrow
  evolving quite constantly
i am not an occupation
  i am this bipolar monkey
in the business of being me
  perpetually incomplete
unfinished almost perfectly
  until the day that i die
on the day i retire
  and become an idea

Author's Note

Reviews

[H L Rose]

I like how it goes back to the first line about being "an idea" in the end. There's a name for doing that, but I can't remember what it's called.

I derived a meaning of growing continuously in this life, and never reaching perfection, but being perfectly yourself in imperfection. I'm intrigued by the "bipolar monkey" phrase.

I enjoyed reading it!

[Davidgeo]

There is indeed a specific term. It's not as fun if I don't let you figure that out eventually.
read moreThere is indeed a specific term. It's not as fun if I don't let you figure that out eventually.

I think the term bipolar is underused. I'm not even a legitiamly insane person but every once in a while my entire outlook changes in a way that is too drastic for me to fully understand.

There was another stanza to that poem... i kinda think what I just won't make sense to you without it.

[H L Rose]

A dunadh!!

[Davidgeo]

Ha... if you were slightly older I would try and sex with you.

[Emma]

We are not ideas-brilliant-we are humans, and we are present and we are living, and unlike an idea we can't be controlled or moved on from, we will keep on being until the day when we can no longer. A perfect example of untamable imperfection.
Not quite sure what you meant by when we retire we do become an idea though, is it that we are no longer as capable as when were younger and more able to fulfil our aspirations and take them further than an idea-if so that is very sad-or were you just referring to death again??
Lovely, slightly strange read, well done

[Davidgeo]

When we 'retire' (die) what is left, hopefully, are memories your loved ones have of you... i.e. an idea. So yeah... totally about death there.

Sorry for the strangeness, it would probably suck without it though.

[Emma]

No I love the strangeness and I'm glad that the ending thought was a happy one rather than my rather depressing interpretation

[Davidgeo]

Your interpretation was not wrong, it just wasn't specifically what I had in mind. It does fit none the less.

[A.J.Thompson]

You've become your own idea, thought provoking, I'm a pessimist when referring to myself, or my life, this is to me anyway, one's self looking at what they would like to be, but only achieving it when they've gone, as in an Artist, works only popular after they pass. I liked it, you can tell, i wrote to much.

[Davidgeo]

I don't think anyone really should achieve what they'd like to be. To me that just means they have low expectations. I think it is wise to hold oneself to a borderline unrealistic standard. Failing to reach that standard is not a bad thing, failing to keep striving after a setback sure is though. Our ultimate goals are not really what defines us, how we take on the challenges in front of those goals is everything... some people eventually give up, accept their position and personally/professionally/emotionally stagnate for the remainder of their days... others keep trying and striving for an idealistic standard they may never fully realize that but, they will never stop growing and finding things out about themselves and the world around them.

[A.J.Thompson]

True, but I also think to hold high hopes is also setting yourself up for failure, my idea is that what I leave behind, in my children, my ideologies, morality will carry on into their's, and in doing so, I carry on, so thus becoming, as you put it, my idea, and this is what I took from your words, be it my interpretation, and you should never give up, change direction perhaps, but always try.

[Davidgeo]

You misunderstood what I am alluding to. One should never actually achieve their ideal... that means you have low standards... honest failure will always how we improve, unless you allow yourself to be crushed by it... then it will be your demise.

Even Michael Jordan's goals were far higher than what he acheived.... one his favorite things to say was "i can't accept not trying"; and I think that mindset was the secret to his success. Not the actual successes, but how he handled the failrure.

[Davidgeo]

I gotta stop responding to these things on a cell phone... ugh... I sound retarded.

[A.J.Thompson]

Ok, my bad, let's just say I enjoyed it

[Davidgeo]

Statements like that lead me to believe you understood not a single word of the aforementioned poem.

You can be an a*****e back to me... it's kinda what you're supposed to do. How you do it is the key.

Very litle of what I do here is what it seems.

[A.J.Thompson]

not that sort of person, i'll leave the banter to you, enjoy your day

[Davidgeo]

To be brutally honest, I think you're fake and just pandering for the sake of interaction. You're not interested in a debate or conversation.... you just want to be seen saying something.

Try harder, I can tell you have it in you.

[Resa]

I liked it!
“Perpetually incomplete “
Very 👍

[Davidgeo]

Sweet.... I'm glad you liked it, it's one of my better ones.

[Hebe]

Loved it ! after all we are all monkeys with cloths on!

[Davidgeo]

Thanks! I prefer clothes to hair myself. Technically I should of used the term "ape" as "monkeys" always have tails. But monkey sounded a little better... and some humans have tails.

[Hebe]

True.....lol!

[Amy]

I like it! The poem is very deep towards the end.

[Davidgeo]

Thanks Amy. I'm glad you liked it.

[AYVID N]

I think bi-polar people are very complete. More complete that those who define themselves as normal. After all, they have the best of both worlds. Don't they? (Forgive me if I sound insensitive. I am bi-polar) As regards monkeys being bi-polar, that's interesting. And novel.

[Davidgeo]

Bi polar people are very complete, we experience almost the entire spectrum of human emotion... but it comes sometimes randomly with varying degrees of intensity. It's usually baffling and or frustrating to normal people. On the plus side... bi polar people are usually very good at making porn and anything else carnal; thrill seeking behavior...etc.. your grey matter is probably very good at both producing and receiving dopamine in large amounts. It's both awesome and a f*****g nightmare.

[AYVID N]

It's worth it.

[Cherrie Palmer]

Being bipolar will let you get twice the work done. :)

I liked how you opened and then closed it with the same thought. Bringing that thought full circle.

[Davidgeo]

Ha... crazy people can be quite productive.

I'm glad you liked my sandwich approach. It's usually a cheap gimmick but I think it was natural enough for this one to not be so bad.

[Cherrie Palmer]

It was the best/ only choice.

[Davidgeo]

I could agree more, but it'd be weird.

[Cherrie Palmer]

I know that is scary a twilight zone moment for sure.