Unfortunate Teller

. you're a good man Nerwriter1 .

the future can influence the past

　

by way of abandonment complex

i've become a fortune teller

a self hating time traveler

　

i will always make us crash

based on what i "see"

　

we will never be "at long last"

　

with certainty i know this

　

i'm a f****n' fortune teller

an a*****e time traveller

from a not so distant future including me

                        and no one

i've seen it

　

from an inexplicable fear

i've become it

　

so i can never be whole

i can never be home

and everything's cold

trapped and afraid

my fear tells me nothing is gold

and I believe it

for no good reason

it's what's made me alone

for all those years

i've "seen" my future

and it makes my past

continue the present

into the future

as if it's already made

　

Author's Note

Reviews

[Ethan]

we will never be "at long last" is a great line. You've captured the unstableness of the past very well with things like "it's what's made me alone
for all those years," switching tenses. I loved Arrival a lot, and I must say, that soundtrack is heavenly.

[Davidgeo]

I love switching tenses. "kingdom came, kingdom come"....

Arrival is an excellent movie. The soundtrack fits perfectly, I think Johan Johannsson won an Oscar for sound editing and was nominated for best original score. The director, Denis Villeneuve, doesn't have a lot of films under his belt but there is another movie he directed called "Sicario" you might wanna check out. It's a very different movie compared to Arrival but still quite good and he uses the same guy for the score, Johan Johannsson.

[Ethan]

Ah my friend loved that movie, along with Samsara. I really need to watch it. Is the soundtrack just as good?

[Davidgeo]

It's good but it's much different than Arrival's. I would say you won't like the soundtrack as much... or the movie, but, that's just because Arrival is such a near perfect movie; Sicario is still the better movies out there.

[Davidgeo]

.... I meant to type... ONE of the better movies out there.

[Ethan]

Have you ever seen the Tree if Life?

[Davidgeo]

I've been meaning to but I never get around to it. It's a Terrance Malik flick right? He's very hit or miss with me.

[Ethan]

Yeah, I like most of his stuff, but this movie is especially good. The soundtrack isn't completely original, but the music chosen is wonderful.

[Davidgeo]

I needed something to watch anyway. Thanks for the recommendation, I'll let you know if I hate/love it.

[BBP]

Really dig the flow of this and the tragic story. Cool twist and title.

[Davidgeo]

Watch the video I left a link for. It will enhance your experience by almost 3 percent. Also, smoke some weed... it's generally helpful in these matters.

[LKBillips]

Fortune Teller indeed. Self Destructive and walled to the teeth. To know oneself and refusing to change even though it's for your own good. Very interesting and well thought out.

[Davidgeo]

It's useful (and amusing) to think about the worst possible version of one's self as an exercise. Some of my favorite prompt themes have to do with an exaggeration of self loathing. It helos to really identify your flaws and it makes you a more honest writer. I think so anyway... people call me a liar though.

[Petar Oklobdzija]

i really enjoyed the voice in this piece. "as if its already made"
well done!

[Davidgeo]

Thanks Petar... it makes me happy that you enjoyed it.

[Annie Rachele]

Wow I really liked this poem, it makes you think. I think you did very well!

[Davidgeo]

Thanks. I'm happy you enjoyed it.

[Ana B.]

This one is dark. But it hit its mark.
Makes me wonder if something really changes once we find the reason why we're alone...
The Arrival picture made me stop by, i'm glad i did.

[Davidgeo]

Things can always change, but I think it's more dependent upon the personality A true pathology is incredibly resistant to conscious efforts... kind of like an addiction. In a way, coping mechanisms are addictions.

I'm glad you enjoyed this. Arrival is a lovely movie isn't it? Painful though.

[Ana B.]

Certainly. At the end of the day it's about wanting it or not i suppose. Addiction though...yes, its one of the examples that this world is not black and white, almost everything is in the grey zone.

Arrival is a great movie. I was skeptic about it at the beginning, but it soon became one of my favorites.Although it's not an easy movie to watch,at least not for me. The soundtrack was incredible as well, i already knew Jóhannsson , but i discovered Max Richter so its a double treat.

[Anthony (aka Mr.e)]

The past can be so distant, yet so close. Nice work TK...

[Davidgeo]

Why thank you very much.

[KWP]

continue the present
into the future

yeah ... I like that .. it tips the rest of it on it's head :D

[Davidgeo]

When you think you can see your own future it is usually what has dictated things that have already past... if only subconsciously.

[Davidgeo]

And thanks for the nice review...

[Gee]

The reason I have strived so hard to make the most of myself is because of my early, formative years. You think that the past has been left behind when you reach your goals but it lurks in the dark corners of the mind, niggling, asking questions that will never be answered as the one they would be put to is dead.
I enjoy reading your work although never always understanding

[Davidgeo]

I share that reason, it's good motivation.

I'm glad you like my writing. I lack serious focus so some things are objectively non sensical. It's not that you're not getting it, I'm just a s****y editor. "a true thing, poorly expressed, is a lie" Stephen Fry

[Davidgeo]

If you were to watch a movie called "Arrival" this will make more sense.

[Joshua Carl Cruz]

robert frost uses a line nothing gold can stay in his poem of the same name. one of your lines reminded me of it and i remembered how good it was. have you read it yet? if you have time read it once. it has a similar feeling. nicely done

[Davidgeo]

Nice reference. Good comment. Thanks for reading.