A Good Monster

i'm a f*****g monster

objectively . . .

　

i provide certain things

    freely

from a lack of shame

and a plethora of goodness

　

pain for your aloe?

a monster for your outrage?

i'm your huckleberry

almost everyday

i will be the man who won't placate you...

does that anger you?

upset you for no good reason?

just the thought of it,

brings up wholesale disagreement.

and there's nothing wrong with that.

as we stand. . .

she's a grand thing,

   miss disagreement

if figured out, very rationally,

and completely purposefully.

in the meantime,

i will remain me so that others may see more clearly

(from an evolution of instinct and discomfort)

from great stress, did you know?, comes unsuspected success

and great self refinement

are you really that kind?

(or just a crying adult pretending to humans)

what are you when the world goes to pot?

*sigh*, we may get to find out...

as the world is dying today

from too much sympathy

too much crying

  for fashionable reasons

too much moral laziness

  out of placation

    and avoidance

but some, some still like it hard

  and real

and from the hard comes the best of us humans

and from the soft comes the end of our evolution

make a choice

welcome to the world

we're all gonna die

so stop pretending it's yours

     stop pretending you are more

   than the rest of us

humans are special

but your name is not human

(we are just labeled meat)

Reviews

[Ethan]

"Pain for your aloe" is so good. On a different note, sometimes I think the ellipses are a little unnecessary. In certain places, like the first stanza, it has a powerful effect. "Objectively" works very well with the pause. But at the end of stanza three, it doesn't have as much of an effect, especially because of the raw bluntness of the line's content. It feels like it softens the blow a bit, but that's just my opinion. I admire pretty much everything you write, and I can learn a lot from your literary strength and ferocity. Awesome job.

[Davidgeo]

I agree about the ellipses. Totally agree, I don't edit as well as I should. It would serve me better if I wrote less and edited often... but... ellipses... are enticing to a lazy poorly edited a*s clown like me. I'm not entirely sure why.

Thanks for recognizing that, you're my new best friend.

[Davidgeo]

Oh and by the way... (ellipses is like crack I can't stop doing it)... but "pain for your aloe" is not my line. It comes from a Nuetral Milk Hotel song. I forget which, I look it up and post it to your profile page when I find it.

[Ethan]

Oh dude! In the aeroplane over the sea is one of my favorite albums.

[Davidgeo]

Jeff Mangum is the world's most underrated living songwriter. It may have come from the album "over avery island" though. I'll remember eventually. There's no way I made that phrase up on my own.

[Ethan]

He's so good. I'm still amazed at how emotional he can make you feel about things like a two-headed boy.

[Davidgeo]

Ha... did you do that on purpose? I'm not certain, but I think "pain for your aloe" came from 'Two Headed Boy pt 2'.

[Ethan]

Hmm, I don't know. My favorite line from that song is "she will feed you tomatoes and radio wires." It's such a perfect album.

[Ethan]

I just checked. I didn't see it in any In the airplane songs so I think it must be off Avery Island or maybe one of their EP's?

[Davidgeo]

It really really is.

In a way I'm glad not many people are into them.

read moreIt really really is.

In a way I'm glad not many people are into them.

It's like this big bright secret mainstream culture is too lazy to investigate. It's, kinda weird actually.

[Davidgeo]

You're probably right, but I'm still certain "pain for your aloe" is a jeff magnum creation.

anyway... this site sucks so some comments get cut off.
"read more"

ugh... this website is run by absentee landlords.

it makes less sense now but here's the rest of my previous comment anyway (for the sake of accuracy and s**t)...

It's like this big bright secret mainstream culture is too lazy to investigate. It's, kinda weird actually.

[Ethan]

Yeah on the other end though, there're a bunch of people who just make fun of the album for stuff like the Jesus Christ line. It's really annoying

[Davidgeo]

I'm an atheist... I have a very contrarian relationship with faith in general. But to take away from something special simply for that reason is absurd to me. Good writing is good writing good music is good music, god has nothing to do with it to me. The notion of god is not a religious concept to me.

[Ethan]

Exactly. People should be able to appreciate art that contains world views they don't agree with.

[Davidgeo]

It's easier to say that than live it. There are writings I find coercive and insidious and most of them happen to be religious in one denomination or another. Sadly, most historic calls to extreme violence through literature are religious. And that is a pattern I will never ignore. God as a being is a warlord, god as an essence is just a spirit of the kernel life (the unknown). I don't pray for anything, do you?

[Ethan]

No, not anymore. I grew up in a Christian family but rejected the values.

[Davidgeo]

You should read more Bukowski.

[Davidgeo]

He's right up your alley

[Ethan]

Ya know, I actually don't like his writing very much. It might not be so much his style itself, because his writing is still poetry, but the effect his style has had on a lot of young poets nowadays. Plath and Auden are my favorites.

[Davidgeo]

Bukowski writes dirty. I try an emulate that. I can see how you wouldn't favor that style. Plath is, great, but so f*****g depressing. I think we are in a transitional phase, the post modernist movement has failed, extreme liberalism is to much like fascism and I think people are starting to see that en masse. We are in a period of chaos, and I am very curious to see how it turns out. Hopefully we're aren't dead before hand.

[Davidgeo]

Maybe we all end up reading Plath and Virginia Wolfe and ironically decide not to blow the world to pieces out of spite... but I doubt it.

[Davidgeo]

Humans en masse are too stupid to get a good subversive joke.

[Ethan]

I can enjoy Ginsberg, who's dirty enough I suppose. It's just his s**t makes me laugh all the time, like Television is a baby crawling towards that death chamber or whatever that poem's called. The president part cracks me up every time

[Davidgeo]

We may not have the same taste's but I certainly do think you have good taste.

[Ethan]

Thank you. I think you do too. Ill give Bukowski another shot. Is there anything specific that he's written you'd recommend?

[Davidgeo]

Start with Bluebird... I posted it on your profile.

[Ethan]

Ah ok. I mean I liked it, it's just too conversational for my taste, which I understand might be a reason people like him. He does sound very personable and his ending was strong.

[Davidgeo]

Well, obviously that's why his fans are fans of him. They like his style, it would absurd to be a fan while not enjoying the subject of that fandom's style, wouldn't you say? But, his style is not at all personable, the definition of that word basically means to have a pleasant disposition... Bukowski does not have a pleasant disposition, he's rough and generally pretty vulgar. I think you meant to use a different word.

[Ethan]

Yeah, you're right I meant personal😂