"Every soul, the philosopher says, is involuntarily deprived of truth; consequently in the same way it is deprived of justice and temperance and benevolence and everything of the kind. It is most necessary to keep this in mind, for thus thou wilt be more gentle towards all." - - - Marcus Aurelius
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Yes, when stripped of everything you stand bare before the world. BUT it is amazing how this 'astringent' act then builds you up again, better than before! And as you say, more gentle. I really identified with your poem. I must remember to take the advice given at the end, BE PATIENT. Well written poem.
Lmao, you even changed your about me... JUST FOR ME...? What are you even doing, bro, lmao... Then you changed it back... Yeah, good move... You like to do that, both with your thumbs up and comments... Deleting and ping-ponging between strategy after strategy... Dude, I even heard that in a rage, you started attacking people who comment on my work...? You are like some sort of personal "super-bot" that spreads my glory... Money can not buy people as devoted as you... Thank you, and like I said, I enjoy this... So... Take that as you will... I would rather much enjoy this never ending... It makes me feel like someone actually cares... You care, right? I mean... You will be sure to signify my affect on your level of caring by acting like a comic book villain, right? Women and children are the BEST for getting to the main-hero... Too bad I am more like an anti-hero, but...You know... Toodlez, Smoochems, till' next time...! (Quick question... Are you on other sites...? Cause I need a boost in popularity over in some other places as well...) Just get back to me whenever on that one, thanks, budz
Fantastic, since I last encountered you... You have done NOTHING but prove me right... Harassing woman after woman with asinine rage... Instead of being able to make any valid counter-arguments... You fell for the EXACT trick you proclaimed to use on Lyn and I.. Get baited, you sexist coward... Bet it feels real good to take that angst out on those who can not defend themselves... I rest my case... Figured someone like you would do the work for me... *Slow-claps*... But, like I said before, PLEASE, continue to troll me, troll others near me... PLEASE... It dedicates a level of energetic commitment I do not even get from my biggest fans... Keep proving you are my number one supporter, and remember... Having chosen me as your fixated god, my power will continue to increase as you menially cast stones before a great swell... L2P, you just lost, again, by your own hand... Predictable to the end... Toodlez, Darlin', and godspeed... I... I win. (Deleting my words now, eh? Have I really gotten to you THAT bad? The emails of support I receive about you... You might be my next step towards stardom)... I should probably thank you... I will not, cause you are nothing more but a stepping stone for those with real talent, but you know... I really should... I win, again and always, Darlin'... *Blows-kiss*
Fantastic, since I last encountered you... You have done NOTHING but prove me right... Harassing wom.. read moreFantastic, since I last encountered you... You have done NOTHING but prove me right... Harassing woman after woman with asinine rage... Instead of being able to make any valid counter-arguments... You fell for the EXACT trick you proclaimed to use on Lyn and I.. Get baited, you sexist coward... Bet it feels real good to take that angst out on those who can not defend themselves... I rest my case... Figured someone like you would do the work for me... *Slow-claps*... But, like I said before, PLEASE, continue to troll me, troll others near me... PLEASE... It dedicates a level of energetic commitment I do not even get from my biggest fans... Keep proving you are my number one supporter, and remember... Having chosen me as your fixated god, my power will continue to increase as you menially cast stones before a great swell... L2P, you just lost, again, by your own hand... Predictable to the end... Toodlez, Darlin', and godspeed... I... I win. (Deleting my words now, eh? Have I really gotten to you THAT bad? The emails of support I receive about you... You might be my next step towards stardom)... I should probably thank you... I will not, cause you are nothing more but a stepping stone for those with real talent, but you know... I really should... I win, again and always, Darlin'... *Blows-kiss*
7 Years Ago
Lmao, you even changed your about me... JUST FOR ME...? What are you even doing, bro, lmao... Then y.. read moreLmao, you even changed your about me... JUST FOR ME...? What are you even doing, bro, lmao... Then you changed it back... Yeah, good move... You like to do that, both with your thumbs up and comments... Deleting and ping-ponging between strategy after strategy... Dude, I even heard that in a rage, you started attacking people who comment on my work...? You are like some sort of personal "super-bot" that spreads my glory... Money can not buy people as devoted as you... Thank you, and like I said, I enjoy this... So... Take that as you will... I would rather much enjoy this never ending... It makes me feel like someone actually cares... You care, right? I mean... You will be sure to signify my affect on your level of caring by acting like a comic book villain, right? Women and children are the BEST for getting to the main-hero... Too bad I am more like an anti-hero, but...You know... Toodlez, Smoochems, till' next time...! (Quick question... Are you on other sites...? Cause I need a boost in popularity over in some other places as well...) Just get back to me whenever on that one, thanks, budz
Above all, for me the message of patience is what nails it. Even better, it is a dialog with self. No need for others to offer unsolicited advice. Enjoyed it!
love this ... nice one ... wasn;t sure for a sec if I was reading one of mine or yours (hahahahaha) ..... it is said that the universe is within us and therefore each and every aspect or our emotions and temperament are in there too ... it is said that one can only surpass these emotions by getting to know them, accepting they are there and then sitting back only to observe them in the future ... that's what this bunch of words says to me ...
Posted 7 Years Ago
1 of 4 people found this review constructive.
7 Years Ago
Sounds about right. I think that if you don't f**k your dark side from time to time eventually it wi.. read moreSounds about right. I think that if you don't f**k your dark side from time to time eventually it will f**k you all the time.
Except for the extreme rage and Malice part, this is me to a dime... well, close to. A fairly good Poem. It's meaningful, simple yet wise, and well written. 100/100 from me
Posted 7 Years Ago
1 of 4 people found this review constructive.
7 Years Ago
Thanks. You really don't need to tell me what 'score' you give it though. It's largely irrelevant.
7 Years Ago
I do that to visually show the writer what I'm giving them. To many, it does come off as irrelevant,.. read moreI do that to visually show the writer what I'm giving them. To many, it does come off as irrelevant, but not to me. It's not just a habit, but my way to show the writer what I think about their specific written piece on top of the written review instead of the writer seeing their overall rating on their profile only. A visualised rating for each individual written piece can also build a sliver more confidnce in their select piece. Saying "it's a great piece" can still get them 100/100 But another person who types the same thing, could instead give the person 85/100. Thats like doing a test at school and the teacher tells you that you did great, but sometimes the mark (rating) they get can mean something to them. Long stoy short... So thats why I do both.
7 Years Ago
You spend too much time explaining s**t that doesn't matter. I was really just f*****g with you, I .. read moreYou spend too much time explaining s**t that doesn't matter. I was really just f*****g with you, I can tell you care about the wrong things too much,
7 Years Ago
Don't try so hard... it's just a review of a stranger's internet ramblings. This ain't exactly art .. read moreDon't try so hard... it's just a review of a stranger's internet ramblings. This ain't exactly art homey.
Take no offence to any of this, and understand this is not a rant however much it may sound like one.. read moreTake no offence to any of this, and understand this is not a rant however much it may sound like one. I'm in a really good mood and trying to help you understand some things. You have to be a writer to appreciate the written word. I do not take my time explaining things; I take my time writing things as it means that much to me at how much the written word can change a person, or how it can change the world. Millions of people also take writing seriously. I write to get my thoughts out, I write to create stories, and I write because I enjoy doing so. The very definition of Art is the creative diversity of painting, music, literature, and dance. Art is meant to be on display and enjoyed by all. You would have to be a writer to the bone to grasp what writing means to people. A story can bring a smile to a child’s face, a research paper can change how a person views an idea, a simple written note saying, "I love you" can warm a persons heart, a nasty note can bring a person to attempt suicide. Words can bend people, make them feel good about themselves, to forgive, to hate, to rethink things in ways they never thought. You really underestimate the written word. Nevertheless, if that is what you believe, then that is what you believe and I do not judge you for that. But to say that you’re writing is just a stranger's internet ramblings and that it’s not art? Do not belittle your work. You clearly took time out of your day to write it, and if it is worth writing, then it is not just worth something to you, it is worth something to us as well. It gives us a look at the person who wrote it, and to a writer, to us, it means something. I, along with millions of people, are passionate about writing, and passionate about reading others written work.
To quote Plato, “Writing is the geometry of the soul”
How about Stephen King, “If you want to be a writer, you must do two things above all others: read a lot and write a lot
If you are going to quote Marcus Aurelius, be prepared to be gentle to all, cause if your not, they will bite back. And this isn’t even me biting back one bit. I just want you to understand that in today’s society, everyone states his or her opinions as facts, and it is indeed wrong but it is also perfectly natural to do so. The written word is a beautiful thing, and it should never be made out as meaningless.
However, here is where I bite back for you telling me that I care about the wrong things too much. Only A-holes will tell another person that they care about the wrong things as if you instantly know what they care about. Telling me that I care about the wrong things is telling me that It’s wrong to care about Equality, about preventing hate crime, about discrimination, injustice, and standing up against bullies and those who wish to abuse woman and children? By saying that I believe in the wrong things is the same as stating that you are all for the things that I am against. That’s so wrong dude.
Now, everything else you said is your own opinion and that is all fine and dandy Bro, I respect that, but do you want to apologize for saying that I care about the wrong things. It was not cool of you to say that.
By the way, writing all of this is child’s play for me. This is how passionate I am about writing poetry alone, not including how I feel about writing stories, papers, life lessons, and music lyrics for kids. I love what I do and it is meaningful to me whether it is meaningful or not to you.
7 Years Ago
Blimey oh Riley William, you do care !
7 Years Ago
I don't really care about your mood... nor do I care to read that wall of text. Focus your efforts .. read moreI don't really care about your mood... nor do I care to read that wall of text. Focus your efforts on more productive things.