Vicious Restraint

focused fury

so i'm a savage

cold, hard dramatic

with the power to destroy

but no, fanatic

and i don't ravage

sans a purpose

about that, i'm quite emphatic

from Illinois, this will is alloy

from a hero to a whipping boy

back again

into nothing

in between something

whatever's real

i'm your mccoy

shame or glory

i will not lie to you

for real

Reviews

[Ana B.]

I like this. I felt the lassitude life has imposed on the narrator. Can't help but ask - the mccoy reference, is that the ''Star trek'' mccoy or you know, just a mccoy...?

[crispysloe]

Fantastic, since I last encountered you... You have done NOTHING but prove me right... Harassing woman after woman with asinine rage... Instead of being able to make any valid counter-arguments... You fell for the EXACT trick you proclaimed to use on Lyn and I.. Get baited, you sexist coward... Bet it feels real good to take that angst out on those who can not defend themselves... I rest my case... Figured someone like you would do the work for me... *Slow-claps*... But, like I said before, PLEASE, continue to troll me, troll others near me... PLEASE... It dedicates a level of energetic commitment I do not even get from my biggest fans... Keep proving you are my number one supporter, and remember... Having chosen me as your fixated god, my power will continue to increase as you menially cast stones before a great swell... L2P, you just lost, again, by your own hand... Predictable to the end... Toodlez, Darlin', and godspeed... I... I win. (Deleting my words now, eh? Have I really gotten to you THAT bad? The emails of support I receive about you... You might be my next step towards stardom)... I should probably thank you... I will not, cause you are nothing more but a stepping stone for those with real talent, but you know... I really should... I win, again and always, Darlin'... *Blows-kiss*

[Joey Nizz]

Powerful words in each line, you made such a perfect rhythmic piece.

Thank you for sharing.

[Davidgeo]

Sometimes I get lucky...

[Joey Nizz]

Or maybe not, sometimes someone is more capable of doing something than they think, so they believe its luck.

[Davidgeo]

You're f*****g up my faux humbleness

[Brittany Zedalis]

This has a catchy, fast-paced rhythm to me, which I liked. Nicely done :)

~Luna

[Davidgeo]

Thanks Moon Lady/Brittany. I need to take out some comma's though I think. I am very happy you enjoyed it.

[A little flame]

Good, bold, relatable piece. Thank you for sharing!

[Davidgeo]

I always knew dick holes like me could be relatable from time to time. Thanks for reading and such.