Redux

. mighta have a spellin' error or two 'r tree . fu don quixote .

i measure pleasant mornings

quietly

by how many sleeping pills i took

gently

yesterday afternoon

where i left my respect

for me self, my damn coherence

f****n' consistency

and

 character and purpose

 all that, overstated, made donnie's windmill

now we measure things

differently

with coffee spoons

specifically

come morning and afternoon

no less hopefully

gaming rhymes about unreasonable things

absurd things

past things

to sleep well at night

by hoping

to wake up tomorrow

hoping to sleep better the next

i may be retarded

but that sound's pretty f*****g reductive

(fml)

Reviews

[Einstein Noodle]

irony and sarcasm mixed in an opaque amber bottle ..with a child proof cap on it no one can open ...i love to sleep ..isn't it a sin ..sometimes i lay down on the couch at 2pm to nap and stay there until midnight when i get up and go to bed fro another 3 or 5 hours ..but my life affords me this luxury at times and my guilt has no foot hold there ... such a sad, tragic, dark poem ...and the depression i read behind it all to common :((( use of language and form you chose creates an easy read over a bit of a rough road ... best of the day to ya TK
E.
ps. please humor an old fart...what is "fml" ?

[Davidgeo]

fml = f**k my life

.... but in a sarcastic way.

How old are you if you don't mind me asking?

[Davidgeo]

And just for funzies... How old do you think I am?

[Einstein Noodle]

i don't mind you asking at all! .... i am working on 70 ... i am guessing you are in your 30s ..but i am terrible at that..even if we were standing face to face ...my wife is much better at it tho ... but she doesn't read poetry :{ thank you for the fml education ;)) it is fitting for your poem indeed

[Davidgeo]

I am 35. good guess. working 70's? I f*****g envy you sir.

[Davidgeo]

(by the way, i only take a half of tab of valium, that s**t is powerful)

[Einstein Noodle]

looking back..i think the Good Lord inspired me to exercise and change my diet for the better at the right times of my life ... i think i am very fortunate to enjoy the health i have ..with the caviate that one can go anytime ..and its those healthy ones that give us a big surprise by dying suddenly ;) my oldest living relative (aunt) recently passed at the age of 109 yrs old and with the exception of the last 2 weeks..lived in her own home with part time help during 4 days of the week ..a real gem .. sure miss her .. half a tab will do ya eh!? i have my daily 24 ounce beer .. usually in the morning (because i can right?!) i will raise it to you today my new found friend ..pleasure to chat a bit ...
ps. i am very surprised i guessed close to your age .. ;)

[Annette Pisano-Higley]

Fellow insomniacs unite! Your poem resonates with me..."reductive"-yes! Can't sleep, then can't stay awake...mind in a fog-"my damn coherence..f****n' consistency..and..character and purpose". Eloquent, angry, weary...yes! Love this. What?- oh must have dozed off....Ha!

[Davidgeo]

Certain drugs and warm tea seem to make almost anything read well.

I like your dog.