Dead For Years

in the wake of my tread there will be no funeral

nothing trying to get out ..

but at that end,

after the last neat whisky

after the thick cigarette smoke and humorous women...

it will strike me.

that i can never leave

(i've known this,

or ever see too far ahead

(i do love surprises,

in that i mostly see the wake of past things

instead, it's painful

to know how the dead is trying to catch up

in memorium

one thousand times before

i've been already dead

for many years

　i've been at my end

trying to catch up

with non sense

　i've been here before

from the wake of someone else

    life is repetition

and non sense

Reviews

[V]

I like the tone about it, also the flow reads pretty undisturbed to me. Regarding your use of words I think it'd sound nice read out aloud, I think you have a feel for choosing words which sound harmonic (at least to my mind's ear). A reflection to me, sober but clear as if your thoughts reached a final destination, a conclusion of happenings, in a seemingly transparent way, close to a personal universal knowledge at the end of your thinking although there seems no true end which is reflected in the slight vagueness of your piece which coexists with the above mentioned clarity of your thoughts, in a way.
A greyish circle of existence.

[Davidgeo]

I was really very high when I wrote that.

[V]

Aha...If being high makes you that creative.. Whatever, still a good piece.

[Luna]

Life is repetition and non sense now that is something i will have to agree with sometimes cause in those sometimes it sucks. Nice poem Mr.finger I like your style.

[Davidgeo]

I do have style

[Bhumika Rao]

this is a beautiful and an intense piece of work.....your choice of words is really wonderfull!

[Davidgeo]

thanks holmes. I like choosing good words for things.

[Sikandar Khan]

Nice And Simple Wording Fantasy Like Death Poem

[Davidgeo]

Is that the title to a book you're working on? Why are all the words capitalized? What the hell are you talking about exactly?

[Not Active]

This is a very emotional and intense poem. There are a few grammatical errors, but other than that it is well written.

[Davidgeo]

Thanks. Because I'm a little lazy I like it when my grammatical errors are pointed out specifically. I like your haircut.